To save a life that night
They failed
A pool of blood lay at his waist
Cuts on his wrists are indications
of the pain he felt each day
The ridicule of classmates, friends, and family
He never received a moments peace until that night
The night he took that 3 inch blade
Sliced it across his wrist
He cut too deep this time
The ecstasy of the pain numbed him
He was free at last
to die
Author notes
Ye Old Wise One
Darkness Consumes
In a list
A contest entry
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375 points, ended April 24, 2007, 24 entries
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wow
that is realy good i know what its like now and you have a good chance but ur my first on in this contest so i wish you luck -
I like this poem, im also a cutter, and im always afraid that one day im going to kill myself, Well thanks for entering my contest and good luck
♥ Christina -
So sad your poem...when someone only wants to stop the pain.
good luck in the contest and great job!
darlintlc -
I really liked this piece. I liked the way it told a story and you could see what was happening. Nice job. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
~~~Vampy~~~ -
Wow! I love this...usually I dont like free verse Im more into ryming but this...its great!
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Emotionally Grabbbing
This is a piece to which I can truely relate. I too bear marks of suicide attempts on my wrists. This piece impacted me in a way that I can totally understand the behind the scence value of this piece.
-Keep the ink flowing!
-Good luck in the contest
-Monachos -
good write but i would look over it..you have a misspelling.
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amazing
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Well
It is written well, good flow and structure. The content though it is well expressed and shows emotion and depth it is a subject that I am not fond of. However your poem is well and you did a good job on it. Thanks for sharing
As always I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy
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