Through the eyes of the wanderers
Seeing hopeless past
Nothing awaits them in the future
Going through life with bare hands
Consequences had been made
Their fate written on stones
The destiny door sealing shut
But leaving an opening gap
Giving them a chance to change
Still holding onto the thin thread of life
Surpassing the horrid past
Eyes filling wisdom of the old
Depth of the jaded green orbs
Looking for everlasting dreams
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First off I am terribly sorry I haven't commented on this sooner (severe computer trouble) and thank you for entering the contest.
Now, onto the poem; I loved the imagery and emotion that seemed to pour out of the piece. It comes in very clear manner. This poem also seems to have an air of hope inside of it.
The almost subliminal rhyme scheme inside of the piece gives it an extra boost. It wasn't prominent, it seemed to subtly connect each line in some places.
Once again thank you entering the contest and sorry for the delay.
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