Pale face with soft glow gazes upward
she rises from dark depths
a mantle of velvet is her hair
spattered with shimmering flecks.
Glorious head tilts down, a twinkle in her eye.
Nothing could surpass this elegance.
She stops at a rippling mirror
framed by shades of green and brown.
It seems to add a frame around the lady.
This picture I present to you
is none other than the Lady Moon,
rising to the twilight sky
highlights of stars in night black hair.
Turning her face toward us
North star sparkles in her eye.
Her image reflected by
forest shrouded lake
where Frog rippled the surface.
Oh, beautiful Moon, oh wonderful night!
Author notes
Option 1. For Contest "Help me feel good" Option 3. For Contest Next Top Poet: U S E R N A M E : Little Blue Bird (Annie Scott
This poem was inspired by a line in the novel "Jane Eyere".
I really had fun writing this and imagining the imagery I used.
I hope you enjoy reading it as much as I did writing it.
God Bless.
P.S. This is also dedicated to all the "Elegant Ladies" in my life, weather it be family or friends. You know who you are.
A contest entry
- Anything and everything !! ( a truthwriter's contest ) by sweethelper.
300 points, ended April 22, 2007, 145 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Round One: Prewrites Only by reckless abandon.
330 points, ended July 23, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Show me what you're made of!!! (extended 4 more days) by Wrozes Thorne.
300 points, ended August 14, 2007, 55 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Last of The Summer Poets (I want to give points away) by jaffa-forbes.
624 points, ended August 25, 2007, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Help Me Feel Good ~ Help Me Feel Happiness! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended August 27, 2007, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - In honor of all the WOMEN! (ROSES!) of the world that God made! by C.o.g..
1500 points, ended March 28, 2008, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - America's Next Top Poet : Auditions by division.
400 points, ended August 18, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Happy Birthday to Storiesuntold Nov. 1 by darlee77.
1800 points, ended November 5, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Such a beautiful piece you have penned
and a wonderful dedication to a woman who is so special
best wishes and good luck
Julie -
Thank you for entering the contest to wish a happy birthday to a lovely lady.
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Nice of you to think of her as one of the eligant ladies, beautiful dedication and honor, terms of endearment. Well done. blessings.
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Thankyou ever so much for such a lovely poem
Oh I feel blessed knowing you honey and so thankyou for this lovely birthday card of love .
I am so excited for I havent ever had anyone do a birthday contest for me before -
This is lovely honey
You have penned a very good poem here I so enjoyed it -
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Thanks mom.
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Lovely imagery and the lines were just simply beautiful
Although, you've showed such images to inspire awes to the reader, I think it would be nice to tell something about this elegant lady to further make the theme stronger- might be unnecessary, though since it's a good piece as it is
All in all, quite impressive and all that
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This lady sounds very beautiful, which means you did a great job painting a picture in my mind. I also liked how this was written. At the moment, I'm going to say no, but please audition for next season. Thank you
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Sure. Would you please send me the link when you do the next season's audition.
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Hi, if you could, please space out your username in your A/N. Thanks!
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hope i did it right
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beautiful
You really tell about this elegant lady so well in your poem. I was surprised by the moon, but I do enjoy surprise endings.
Jeannette
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I love the way you have personified the moon as an elegant lady. As a suggestion, I would have left out
"This picture I present to you
is none other than the Lady Moon, "
and place this in the AN.
Always leave a little bit of mystery in your poems.
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I think this is a wonderful poem. wonderful flow it runs smoothly. The detail work is awsome, and it was a pleasure to read.
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I know it is supposed to be the moon, but this made me picture the evil queen from Snow White. Not the hag version, but her when she was the fairest of them all. Anyways this was a cute poem.
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Thanks. I can see where you could think of the evil queen from Snow White. LOL I never thought of that but it kinda does.
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This piece was beautiful and very warming ( meaning it just made you want to say awe ) thank you for sharing this with our group - keep penning dear poet
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Breathtakingly Beautiful...
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...I see the moon
...the moon sees me.
This is exquisite lass.
Lots and lots of magic.
I like the introduction of the moon
presented in the center of this fine piece.
Thank you for taking time to read my work.
The night rings tried and true
in this planetarium of poetry.
Blessings,
LOWELL POE
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Oh beautiful poem , oh wonderful write ! Stunningly creative leaving a warm soft glow on the heart
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What beautiful way you have with words...a pleasure to have shared such! Thankyou.
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This is indeed a beautiful piece bringing the wonderful immagery in the poetry you rendered by your heart..well done....
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Truly a beautiful vision indeed
Youhave penned a true work of art for the imagination to gaze upon
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Outstanding Talent, Poet!!!
I am so happy I found your poem today, it is amazing. The title to this piece is perfectly fitting and draws the eager reader into a world of mystery and colorful fantasy. Excellent use of metaphor, with simply beautiful imagery! Your wonderful and memorable poem, "Elegant Lady" will go down in history as a fantastic, classic masterpiece!! I wish you the very best of luck in these contests, you have written a winner!!! Thank you so much for sharing your profound thoughts with all of us. I can see you are a literary soul. As they say here on AP, write on, shine on, Poetess, and please do keep on dreaming... for all of our sakes!!!! Peace, Cyn
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Beautiful and elegant
You set a nice tone in this. I enjoyed the read.
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Very nice poem I love the picture that you enabled me to see through your poem I could picture it exaclty! I have a suggestion though you might want to change line 8 "framed by shades of green and brown". To shades of green and blue or green and black! Thank you very much for entering my contest and God bless!
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Thank you for the thoughtful comment, I am glad you enjoyed it. And thank you for the suggestion of changing line eight but "framed" fits better because there is a line before that that says "This PICTURE I present". See what I mean?
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yes I know I didn't mean that I meant "framed by shades of green and blue" or "framed by shades of green and black".
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Wonderful write very beautiful I love the imagery in it as well keep up the excellent work and niaish for sharing
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Wow, this is beautiful! The imagery very strong and elegant. I love it. I've always been intrigued by the night sky.
Niaish for sharing! Very very lovely
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*Gasp* I love this! It's so beautiful!
Síochán leat
~Mairéad~
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Beautiful imagery in this piece thank you for sharing this.
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Wow what a lovely way to honor the lovely and elegant ladies in your life. This was such a pleasure to read this morning. And I love Jane Eyere. You take care, Sandy
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Niaish Ma eno from all your Children, a beautiful piece reflecting on Mother natures beauties...Bravo, Kindest thoughts and wishes, Anna-Marie
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serene and lovely. I enjoyed the imagery. thank you for sharing ~blessings always~ Trisha
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This presents such a feeling of awe and peace. A wonderful job well done and a delight to read.
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A good interpretation of "Lady Moon." a calm tranquil poem that is pristine in nature and intent. The words flow from the tongue rolling gently into the heart. -
Lady Moon
is a wonderful aspect of our lives. While just last night, she was prominent even more in the night sky, with the lunar eclipse.
Your words and images flow wonderfully, casting her in a new light, with a clearer focus. Niaish for sharing.
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This is a serene poem describing the matchless moon that rules the night and touches our hearts with her beauty. I like the structure of this poem delivering a vision and later bringing it into focus. Niaish for sharing this lovely work.
Gray Elk
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Congrates On The HM,
A very wonderfully inscribed piece here!
Thanks for sharing, and keep up the great works!
Peace, Timothy
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*whistle*
That was simply beautiful. What else can I say?
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Beautiful and amazing imagery and flow. Niaish for sharing
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BREATH TAKING
I am in awe! of your beautiful words...they just seem to flow across the page and lay softly upon the heart That wonderful glow of GrandMother Moon against the darkened night...sighs...Niaish my sister for sharing you with me
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Such a lovely write and so romantic, as I think most of us are who love poetry. This paints a picture on the window of your mind and I love that style. So pleased to see someone who writes firstly for her(or him)self before others and if someone else likes it too, that is a welcome bonus. This is beautiful.
"Niaish ma eno from all your children" has added a comment.
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Wonderful poem--I think the moon will always be a mystery, no matter how much science we throw at it. Enjoyed reading your poem and thought it both creative and unique!
Niaish Mo eno from all your children member has added a comment--NIAISH (thank you) always for your beautiful poetry!
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Elegant
You've Beautifully penned this poem... you're captured the imagery into a perfect kodak moment that shall remain as a beautiful memory as your poem... you've painted with simple words the masterpiece that truly is a winner to me... very well written and I love it... thanks for sharing your talent... take care Minoo
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Thank you so very much it makes me feel really good to read your comment. I am so pleased you liked this poem. It is also my dad's favorite.
Thank you again.
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beautiful creation, well done, lovely imagery truely wonderful.
Tasha
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Excellent
Wonderful creation. Terrific use of images.
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Beautiful imagery here, loved the choice of words and how you used imagery to make me see what you were portraying. Love writes based on our feelings from songs, novels and the such.
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"Oh, beautiful Moon, oh wonderful night!" Nice line. Good stuff and good luck!
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Lovely, that about sums it up. This poem was absolutely beautiful!
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oh wow!! this in so many ways brought tearsto my eyes. a very descriptive piece and so very lovely. Thanks for sharing.
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Wow, what a awsome poem I enjoyed it a lot.
Amber -
Very well written,My daughter(who is reading over my shoulder)really enjoyed it.Great job!Hugs,Heather
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I like this. The imagery is beautiful. Thanks much for entering and good luck in the contest!
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Very nicely written...Great job and good luck
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Stunning and vivid imagery in this piece. I've never read the book but I've seen the movie and really liked it. Awesome write. Thanks for the entry in my contest.
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Lovely!
My, what a lovely poem! The imagery is so amazing and fresh, so lush. You really captured my attention as well as my heart with the great descriptions.
The poem is also crafted very skillfully. I actually had to double-take once I got to the lines "This picture I present to you / is none other than the Lady Moon". Up until that point, I imagined a literal woman, but then going back, I found every description and image to work perfectly in both ways, in describing the moon as well. Great use of double-entendre there!
Overall, I just loved the poem and I had a great time reading it and taking in the beauty you so elegantly wove. Please keep writing!
~Gabreon~
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Cool
I love the word choices in this one. It sets the emotional tone and rhythm perfectly. Great imagery you have painted also. The type that changes depending upon the reader's personal experience. Great Write! ~Peace~Gary
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Oh my. I especially enjoyed this poem. The detail was vivid and majestic at the same time. I especially enjoyed the way you described her and the images you threaded througout the poem.
Brilliant!,
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Failed.
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crystaldust 07-03-07 16:22
This is really beautiful, Annie Scott, and I love it. It's a wonderfully imaginative way of seeing the moon in all her glory and I'm so glad you call her "Lady". It also has lovely touches of humour: "a twinkle in her eye","frog rippled surface". I wonder if you could find another description for "North Star twinkles in her eye"? It is a trifle too close to your first matephor. Not wrong, but you have so much imagination I'm sure you could find another description.
I have enjoyed reading it and am glad you loved writing it. That's how poetry should be. Good luck in the contest.
Joy
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Interesting tale of the Lady of the Moon. Pale comparision to the poem title "The Enchanted Forest", only two lines hint she lives in one. Good luck inthe contest...~Sie
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Ah that's just it
The Lady moon lives above the forest and pretty much where ever she pleases. She gets to look down at the enchanted forest and watch the antics of the inhabitants. But I could not include that because it did not go along with my inspiration.
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A beautiful ode to the moon. Thank you for a lovely entry and good luck.
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Bee-u-tif-ullll lol
That was enjoyable & refreshing to read! You have glorious talent! Keep up the good work!
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