Sweet singing bird caught
They squeeze it in a vice grip
Then insist; “sing bird”
Author notes
5/7/5 haiku; first five syllable title as allowed so additional image is not injected.
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Aww.... that is sad and very strong though it is short. The picture itself is sad, and then you got the haiku written so well. Great write and truly sad.
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oh wow, this is powerful and sad...bravo!
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Thank you
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oh, this is perfect. Yes, this is
what I want to create...a beautiful
haiku...simple, lovely, a piece of art.
Love, Lane
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...tragic'n true.
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A parable of perfection ...
told in such concise sad lines. Human hands ... death.
Love
Myra
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Ah, so sad, yet true.
Thank you for entering your Haiku into
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love,
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Wow!!
You brought this vibrant artwork to life in so few words. That's what I find so appealing about haiku; the challenge of searching for the chosen words to best describe a captured moment like this raven, ready to burst out in sweet melody.
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Poignant.
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Takes my mind to that indescribable place really great haiku takes me. Wonderful work.
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Whoa now that is a haiku.
Well done
Good luck in the contest
delila
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Had the story told of a young girl that brought the pet canary to the mother in her hands - she had held it around the neck wanting to make it sing - it was dead. Reminded me of this when I read your poem - how true.
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a strong message in few powerful words ...
the perfect metaphor ...
I'm taking a haiku-class right now, since I feel unable to compose a decent haiku, god knows why ...
let's see if I'll learn ...
maa
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i love birds and the thought of one being in a vice grip is terrible. there is another conotation also in my mind when i saw this as a metaphor. it is not good. the poem itself left a very vivid picture and i admire those of you who can write these haiku things as i do not d very well with them. thank you for sharing this with me today. viyanna rosemarie
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How true this is!!! I know this feeling all too well. You have penned a maverlous piece, so deep in meaning. Such strength in brevity!
I love it!!!
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Too much presure in this world for sure..
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I am in 100% agreement...
with Dad on this Amera...
having 2 children who are in the special education system in our schools...I deal every day with the "No Child Left Behind" campaign leaving my kids in the dust because they don't learn like the other children do...
Excellently written...
Great work as per your normal my dear...
xo
Heidi
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The essence of life
is always beyond our grasp
we can hold death tight
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Reminds me of our educational system here in the states????? they squeeze the children to make them conform, to be perfect little robot slaves for the work masters. but, it is a pretty haiku, love the pic and the word font, very pretty!
Nice work, as usual, dear
Dad
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Yes...I know how this feels.
Lane
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