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In Praise of the Red Cross

I must dig deep for courage to rescue

Rubble removed
Around protruding arms
Careful not to break the
Prevailing anguish.

My distressed tears would drown

Tides of crisis battled
Opportune breaths caught between
Sink and swim
Regained, relieved, helped.

My heart would cease to try.

Effort expended
With hope or in vain
Encompassing vocation and careful,
Beauteous compassion.

Next to heroes
I'm pathetic

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  • Violet Moodswing Greeters member
    April 4, 2007

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    Very nicely done. I love the ending, it really was not expected. The poem flows nicely from thought to thought and gives me a "feel' rather than simply a picture.

    Thanks for your entry and best of luck.


  • Sharcu silver member
    April 3, 2007

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    Wow! Nice job! I always appreciate a poet who can write in free verse effectively. Nice choice of words and it flowed well. Thanks for sharing
    --Tim


  • wishintreeUK
    March 27, 2007
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    Thank you for entering.

    All those who helped out at ground zero did an excellent job, be it a small effort because of circumstances or the huge acts the firemen and other public services had to do, they all did it willingly that is what counts... the Red Cross too did a good job of work, doing their best to help anyone they could.

    Well done and thank you for entering

    ~Katie~


  • Samplette gold member
    March 9, 2007

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    This is a good write. I don't think we need or should compare ourselves to heroes. They are a special blend, and just because we aren't doesn't make us pathetic. Best to you in the contest. :fSam


  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    March 8, 2007

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    Thanks for your entry

    Everyone is a hero at some point in their lives. It does not matter if you have fear and think twice about doing it. The end result is what matters. Every hero thinks twice and is scared but what makes them a hero is that they do it anyway.

    Good luck in the contest and welcome to allpoetry. I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

    God bless
    Tammy


  • FifthDove
    March 7, 2007

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    Thanks for the entry and welcome to the site!

    What a wonderful metaphorical poem you have penned. This is unique and beautifully poetic, nice work Thank you very much for taking the time to write for and enter our contest. Best wishes and welcome to AllpoetryDove


  • Rosemary Stroebel silver member
    March 7, 2007

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    Thanks for entering

    This is a truly stunning poem you have written. It has a good flow that is fitting to the topic, making one pause to drink in the strength of the words. I particularly like the closing for no hero sees themself as one - just a person doing whatever is to be done.

    A true and emotional write.

    Let the ink flow and your fingers dance

    Rosemary


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    March 6, 2007

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    WELCOME TO ALLPOETRY!

    I really enjoyed reading this poem. The layout, imagery and rhythm are all excellent. You certainly put much feeling into this write. It's brevity with words made it all the more powerful for me.
    Yes, the Red Cross certainly have to do things that many of us could not cope with. A most wonderful organisation!
    Thank you for this fine entry and all the best in our contest
    Gaylene

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