I've never been so lonely,
When there's no one here to hold me.
Than when I knew she gladly would,
If before me, she was stood.
And I know it's coming soon,
As I lay here in my room.
Because this bed is so damn cold,
And these nights are getting old.
I'm steady staring at the door,
Just waiting for my cure.
I know it's all in vain,
I'm all alone again.
She's far too far away,
I just wish that she could stay,
There's sunlight in the sky,
And it meets my open eye.
I just wish that I could sleep,
Go, so very deep.
Remaining here like this,
'Till I'm woken by her kiss.
Because I'm sick of living without her,
Every night it feels like murder.
I've died a hundred times before,
And I'll die a hundred times more.
Author notes
All I want is to hold her
In a list
A contest entry
- To You... My Love by pimp daddy satin.
303 points, ended April 21, 2007, 110 entries
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Very nicely done
I really like this. Would you just look at how the puter has capitalized the start of each of your lines. It would imporve the standard of the poem if you went through and made small letters where required. Whatever the case the poem is really great.
HUGS
Jan -
Such sad longing in this piece. It seemed a slight bit stilted in places, but nothing serious to be certain. Just a thought. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e *
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I really like this. So much longing and feeling.
Awesome write,
Best of luck in the contest.
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great
A realy inspirational poem.
Lots of emotion, which is good.
Awsome job.
-Kaitlyn-
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Nice
What can any man ask for but a woman to love and hold in his arms -
Easy to read into this - can feel the loneliness and how much you miss someone. the rhythm and rhyme work well here and you have expressed your sentiments well in these lines.
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Wow, if I had love like this an ocean couldn't keep me from the other person.
Very good write. I'm so impressed, its rediciulous. Not many people can write like this.
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