Io of the ancients
beauty come to life
unaware of Zeus’s intent
no thought to anger his wife
her beauty was her downfall
for it drew the lust of Zeus
wondering what would befall
when he spent time to seduce
for her protection he did turn
her into a show white heifer
claiming it was for her concern
but it helped to hide his affair
Hera demanded the lovely cow
To be her very own
Zeus could not refuse her now
Poor IO was alone
Argos sent to guard her
fell to Hermes sword
details were such a blur
then the horrid gadfly horde
to drive her from the land
into the halls of Egypt
this was not what he had planned
escape she could not attempt
she was his with no escape
his way with her he had
he would not call it rape
that it was over she was glad
yet now she bore his child
now his thirst was quenched
he left her there and smiled
the affair in her mind was etched
now her life begins anew
ripe with the child of a god
the memory she could not subdue
though her life was no facade
Author notes
Picture 1
In a list
A contest entry
- Picture Inspiration........... by Lyre-Bird-.
530 points, ended March 9, 2007, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Amazing
how you brought this Inspired to Life. Very fantasy, and Beautiful Imagery to say the least.
I really think this should have won Gold, but I know the opportunit will come again and u need to reenter this one. Loved It, Outstanding picture.
Ephiphany
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Your Imagery is even more captivating than the Image!!!
I mean It! I fell in Love with these thoughts and descriptives in expressions of yours!!!!
Your poetry here really deserves better than Honorable! You should enter more contests with this one!!!!!!!
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Love the picture featured with this work... reminds me of contemporary Luis Royo... only slightly more vibrant. Very nice, in any case.
As far as the writing goes, I think I understand what you are trying to do here, however there are a lot of false rhymes and rearranged sentences that defy the reader to correctly interpert them in a way that preseves flow.
I am not generally into matching syllable counts, and the like, it takes too much away from expression in most cases. However, given that flow controls all, it must be paid its token in works that move along at an unbroken pace. I recommend you rethink this work with that in mind.
Good luck in your future works.
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Thanks for the critique. I will take it into account,
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M'Lady,
This is an excellent write, it makes me want to go back and re-read several of the illiads....mmm the memories...anyway, well written and fits so well with the picture.
Blessings,
Rev. Alimae
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Well written
Like the poem and the picture was cool. Good luck in the contest.
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Thank you for entering the contest!!!!!!
Hope you have enjoyed the contest as much as we have enjoyed reading your entry
Best of Luck
Tracey -
Great write...
I chose this picture also....it's interesting to compare and contrast...
You are very good with the rhyming...excellently executed...
Grood luck in the contest with this masterpiece
xoxo
Heidi
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Very nice! I was so hoping that someone would choose this picture! An intriguing story to grab the readers interest. Good luck to you in this contest!
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Well written I really like it alot. I could see the gods and goddesses that was great imagery. Thank you for the write.
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Quite a good poem with a great storyline entwined. The rhyme scheme was good, though "god" and "facade" don't rhyme. Great work.
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WOW! Just brilliant. Flows beautifully and tells a mystical story so well. The imagery was awesome. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Jeannie
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