The house is dark, though all lights are on
The mind in chaos, though all thoughts are gone
Waiting for truth to bring me home
Until that time, I randomly roam
Searching for answers that never appear
For words of compassion I never hear
Looking for reasons for what has become
For not till they're found, will this wandering be done
~greg~
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This is a beautiful poem. but the only solid object is the house. All of the other subjects are ideas, such as the mind, words, reasons. I suppose I am trying to say that by making the poem more concrete I could relate and understand it better. Ideas are difficult to feel and picture. What do you think?
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i love this its great. its short but great
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This is really actually quite good. I feel like I can connect to it. I am going through a wandering stage myself actually with having no answers.
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Thanks!
I think we are all searching for something, though sometimes we don't even realize just what that something is. Hopefully one day we'll find it.
~Greg~
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Your short works are astounding! You put so much intensity into a few lines that it never ceases to amaze me. The power behind these thoughts is nothing short of fabulous. Another impressive write from you! Always a pleasure to read your work!
~Lori
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Thank you so much for that Lori!
It means a lot coming from you, for I feel the same way about your work. I've totally enjoyed every thing I've read of yours.
Thanks for the comment!
~Greg~
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WONDERFUL!
Such beautiful words expressing the searching of ones heart and soul to find true happiness and peace.
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Thanks Puppydog!
Yes, it is definitely a search. Unfortunately, I think I am still searching. -chuckle-
~Greg~
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Nicely done. It reminds me of Melmoth the Wanderer, perhaps because I just read it... Anyway, good job.
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Wow, this poem drew me in right from the beginning. Only thing is I wish I could have read more
Great job though!
~Kevan Henshaw~
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Thanks Minorchar!
I haven't read Melmoth the Wanderer. Is that from someone from here, or from a book or something? You've got me interested now. -chuckle-
Thanks for the comment though,
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Thanks Kevan!
This felt like one to keep short, cause I had nothing more to say at the time.
~Greg~
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I think it is a great poem, thought provoking and
well versed. I read twice to get my mind around it. Well done. -
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Thank you Ronn!
It came from inner thoughts about something that happened a while back.
~Greg~
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I think it is important in a short rhyming poem to keep a consistent syllable count. Line 3 is one short and the last line is too long. I enjoyed the imagery in the first line and I think with a little tweaking this could be a great poem.
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Thanks for the suggestion Peliroja,
I'll go back and look at it. Thanks
~Greg~
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This is short, and so I was more apt to like it. I enjoyed it because I can relate to the questioning tone. The style and the wording reminded me some of E. A. Poe.
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Thanks Shirley!
This was my first attempt at a short poem. Thanks for the comparison to Poe, I never thought of it that way, but I love his stuff.
~Greg~
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The first line was a very intriguing irony, and very good imagery. I enjoy shorter poems. Sometimes, fewer words get the point across much more powerfully!
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Thanks RI!
That was my first short poem. It seemed better that way.
I'm glad you liked it.
~Greg~
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