If I died,
No-one would care,
It would be like I was never there,
If I died,
No-one would mourn,
Some would look upon my death with scorn,
If I died,
No-one would cry,
In a black coffins where I'd lie,
If I died,
Some would cheer,
They'd have a party lasting a year,
If I died,
No-one would fret,
Wouldn't give a monkeys, I bet,
Before my enemies did,
On they're deaths I would bid,
Thats what would happen,
If I died...
Author notes
I thought I'd extend it...
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Comments
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Interesting, but I doubt it's the truth!
I thought the line about a party lasting a year was a bit weak, and sort of stretched to get a rhyme, but otherwise it seemed very natural.
A sad thought, but good poem overall.
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This is good. A great piece to enter. The only thing that confused me was coffinsn, im not sure what it should be but maybe you should take a look at it. Thanks for entering!
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its supposed to say coffins.
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Well...
I can relate to that poem... I have felt like that many many times in my life. I hope that you have someone in your life that truely does care for you. I know everyone has someone, sometimes our someone just doesnt know how to show it. Nice poem, nice usage of words, flow was good... enjoyable read... something I could relate to... Keep it up. Check out my "opinionated truth" poem... I think you might like it.
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