Now I lay me down to dream
I pray that I won’t ever scream
And if I die before I wake
I pray the lord my soul to break
Torrid, store it, in my mind
Insanity isn’t far behind
Running, screaming, down the lane
Can’t hide, conceal my pain
I’m falling, crawling, in my mind
The red-hot ecstasy unwind
Children scream and mothers weep
I’m so scared, I’m in too deep…
Please tell me what you think
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nice rhyming. i realize the meaning.
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amazing poem, i loved how it all fit together.
i'm speechless right now, it was a wonderful peice
*unchained*
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beautiful poem, i loved it,
Torrid, store it, in my mind
Insanity isn’t far behind
Running, screaming, down the lane
Can’t hide, conceal my pain
I’m falling, crawling, in my mind
was deffiantly my favorite part and i thought the title suited the poem perfectly
keep writing
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Beautiful... I love this one... you're a great writer...
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oh, thanks! ive always looked for ways to modify it to my liking!
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I really like this.The flow is really good. I like how you changed the lord's prayer in the first stanza.
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thanks
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wow
amazing poem i really like it because it flows so well and everything goes together jus like it should. -
AH! I HAVE NO WORDS! this is wow good. fav line, 'insanity isn't far behind' and i so agree with ya there. this has a really good rythm/beat goin' on and ima definetely have to read your other stuff. good luck!
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