You play your Games
Treat me like dirt
Make up your names
Feeling so hurt
When push comes to shove
I've had enough
I don't need your love
I've called your bluff
A gaping hole
Causing a gap
Burning my soul
I feel like crap
I gave you my best
Sleeping around
You leave me stressed
I'm left astound
Tore me apart
I'm just a pawn
Breaking my heart
Love is gone
Author notes
Just a glimpse to what im feeling
A contest entry
- 1st Contest - Invite only! by Flawless Voice.
320 points, ended March 7, 2007, 3 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Whatcha think?
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yup, that's how a heart breaks alright!!! Nice rhyme and flow witht this piece. Betrayal always makes for a good write, when you allow yourself to be enveloped in the emotions!!
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Hmm
I didn't do it
I hate her with a passion already. You always tell me they suck but they dont. I think they are great and I love when people write from emotions, unlike I have been lol. WOnderful write Dave, you need to get it out so you dont kill her. And BTW Jon did inspire the one poem 
haha
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A perfect and simple glimpse that really gives us a taste of true feeling! I really like this, poems that make me able to feel what the author is feeling are my favorite kind...and I can really hear the frustrated anger in the words (sorry, I never know how to adequately express what I'm trying to say so I hope it makes some sense!).
I love the realism!
Thanks for sharing...
Michele
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Dang...
You done really good in this poem! You express your feelings so well! Wow!I loved it! Keep on writing!!! -
Hey, you really done well in this poem. Really does somehow engages people to read it. It has a nice flow and a repetition of the rhyming scheme.
It somehow feels as though I'm feeling like this mostly everyday of my entire life. I love in vain. =\
I especially like this stanza,
"You play your Games
Treat me like dirt
Make up your names
Feeling so hurt"
Well done, and keep it real, because you have me as a friend to support you by. -
aww this is sad and sweet and awsome i like it it really good. the flow was really good and it amazing
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That was very desriptive and also pretty sad. I know how you feel and it suck's. Always remember u r worth more than being treated like that. What is with the games people play anyway. ?? Anyway, don't get me started..lol
All the best.
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