This could have been the coldest night,
The night that kept me thinking,
The moment that I never want to happen,
Because it will just make me realize,
The many things I’ve done wrong.
Though this will make me hard,
But I’ll do my best,
Though it will make fall apart,
But I know, this will make me rest.
It’s hard indeed,
To keep this kind of state of mind,
But there’s no choice at all,
Just to be against of my own desire
I know time will come,
That the flowers will bloom,
On a sunny day of my life,
A life when all the wrong things will be right.
A contest entry
- For The Nights I Cant Remember by etoile.
425 points, ended July 10, 2008, 20 entries
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it's nice, it's clear that english isn't your first language, but it's definately not bad, a little bit of editing could make this a very good read goodluck!
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so true. when it feels like the world is against you on one of those dark nights, the only thing you can be positively sure of is that sunlight is just around the corner if you can hang on. great write.
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Good, hopeful poem!
I like this piece with such a fine, strong hopeful message. It represents a very good outlook on life and the strong desire that everything will be OK! Interesting title, great finish and good choice of words. Good solid job of writing meaninful poetry and expressing your feelings!
Good luck in the contest!
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Great! I love your hope and optimsim, in spite of circumstances!I have written much poetry based on this theme!
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random parts rhymed which was nice
but at times it kind of threw me off.
"Though this will make me hard,
But I’ll do my best,"
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i didnt really understand that line.. prolly me just being stupid
but otherwise i loved the first stanza, and the last stanza really ended the poem strongly.
good job and good luck in the contest
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