I taste the vodka on your lips
I feel the electricity from your fingertips
I see the moonlight alive in your eyes
I hear each of our barely audible sighs
I smell that a storm is coming in
We both know we're reaching the end
Neither of us wants it but life is a stage
Tonight's performance? Tragedy and rage
My heartstrings pull as tight as they can
Just goes to show I'm born to be a lonely man
I'm told I can never see her again
I'm told I must be gone with the wind
I am a hopeless romantic but I'm growing more cold
Love used to have meaning, now it's packaged and sold
My loved one begs and cries for me to stay
I just hand her my heart and say, I won't need this anyway...
Author notes
Pleasure of love lasts but a moment, Pain of love lasts a lifetime.
A contest entry
- PROVE YOU'RE WORTHY OF MY POINTS by EmeraldDaze.
480 points, ended June 5, 2007, 60 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - There's only hate, there's only tears, there's only pain, there is no love here. So what will you do? by Jaffa-.
700 points, ended February 26, 27 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow. id tell you which lines I like but I love them all. great write. only thing is is it kind of seems like you changes direction with out telling the reader why. I think the why is important here. but great write
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wow...
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That was just amazing, the rhyme was...and the flow...the point is that it was amazing and i am a little too awestruck to write much else. Thank you very much for the entry. Amazing. -
Beautiful... this poem mesmerized me.
I couldn't name just a few lines that I liked, because I loved them all. XD
It's so sad that this actually kinda reminds me of my relationship, (which is not a long distance one), I don't get to see him very often though...
Anyways, this is an amazing write, good luck in the contest.
Keep writing.
~angel
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What a beautiful yet sorrowful write. It is so full of emotion, it is really moving. I thought the ending was especially powerful: " just hand her my heart and say, I won't need this anyway...". This is an excellent write, thanks so much for entering the contest, and best of luck in it!
peace
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WOW! This is a sad, but yet such a beautiful poem you have written. I love how you stated that tonight's performance, is tragedy and rage. So much emotion in this poem. You have done a wonderful job, and wish you luck in the contest!
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wow, that is sad...but a truly incredible poem. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Thanks a lot for the review. It's always nice to hear that people enjoy my poetry. Thanks so much.
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I like this one. A lot. My favorite part was... all of it.
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Thanks a lot. That's kind of you.
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Neither of us wants it but life is a stage
Tonight's performance? Tragedy and rage
That was my favourite part
You've done a great job here
It was nice to read
and perhaps, it caught my interest
Thank you for entering
Good Luck in the contest
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I just hand her my heart and say, I won't need this anyway...
i love that line!
this is a very powerful poem, full of great imagery. thank you very much for this fine entry and good luck
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Thanks a lot for the compliment and the applause. I appreciate you even reading it. Thanks once again.
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The heart is certainly a fragile thing and most people can empathize with the sentiment expressed in this piece. It feels like a peek inside of a personal journal, into private thoughts that you allow your reader to see. Love can be beautiful and it can also be painful; unfortunate that most times it is the later. Well said. ~ Elizabeth
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Thanks for reading. I tend to agree, most people seem to have far more terrible luck with love than anything else. A personal journal, I like that way of looking at it. Thank you very much for your wonderful review.
Brian
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