He loved the life, it was so risque, a murderer by trade.
A monster by profession and a dark avenging angel with great pride.
He was responsible for tearing the wings off of glamorous butterflies.
Beautiful, broken and almost grotesque in their exaggerated celebrity lifestyles.
They make you want to chloroform them, just to let them die with a little dignity.
Just a silhouettes of their original selves, they beg to be silenced.
All you can say is "Hallelujah", when you snuff them out.
Stunning, how electric the experience of taking a life can be.
It's like drowning a dog, after you lured him with a juicy steak,
Or the innocence of a child, so beautiful in death.
It was his job, to bring the sordid back to purity.
It was his job to silence the sin, stop the egos, and end the pain.
And he did it with great love, reverence and patience for every detail.
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"He was responsible for tearing the wings off of glamorous butterflies.
Beautiful, broken and almost grotesque in their exaggerated celebrity lifestyles."
Was my favorite part... good job and thanks for entering my contest. -
"He was responsible for tearing the wings off of glamorous butterflies." That is probably my favorite line...it explains so much! Good write and good luck on the contest
love alwayz and foreva
~~SK~~ -
I really liked the content here, but the flow wasn't great.
If you could manage to edit this and make this poem rhyme I think it would help, or maybe just have shorter lines, up to you really.
I liked thies line quite a bit:
"It was his job to silence the sin, stop the egos, and end the pain. "
This has potential, do some editing though.
-Allura -
i agree with *going nowhere* it was a creepy piece. i am dfinately going to go and have a cup of coffee now
the imagery was perfectly suited. a lil creepy also lol
keep on writing
Til
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i wasnt particularly fond of the flow of this except right at the end.
Thanks for the entry. -
"They make you want to chloroform them, just to let them die with a little dignity. Just a silhouettes of their original selves, they beg to be silenced."
Yay! I love it, especially that part. Great job & keep up the great work!
Thanks for entering
&herats; Sam -
This is a creepy one...well written, but leaving me with a little bit of shuddering....good job.
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