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Pandemonium

 

The ecstasy of mortal life, how easily it disappears.

Cruel mimicry shouted at haunting pleas.

Lives callous gambles, worthless enough for wagers.

Contrast between living and dead, bitter pity.

Molten metal saved for another chest.

How tranquil the seconds before you die.

Blood pooling in desolate alleyways,

littered with greasy trash.

Bodies absorb myriad gunshots,

under dimming streetlights.

Do not deviate from clear routes,

or veer off crowded avenues.

Radicals traduce already tarnished names.

Tamed souls turned corybantic by fear.

Perspicuous senses feigned by loss.

So is the city plunged into furor.

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vainly verdant
Okay, basically this is option two, but I used more than five words from each list, hope you don't mind.
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  • Diatribes
    June 5, 2007
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    How poetically thuggish


  • PlasticPrecious
    March 7, 2007
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    dang kid!

    this was really, really good!
    i loved it!
    great read!


  • Sokarjo
    March 6, 2007

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    Fantastic piece... doesn't have to be a beautiful place, and your imagery is excellent. Superb even. Thanks for this great entry.

  • IndividualEleven gold member
    March 5, 2007
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    Awesome

    nice imagery, flow was great, and you used those word banks words in a most imaginitive and incredible poetic way, this is fantastic, hope you win this, loved the pic too. - Jacen an IndividualEleven.