Alone she swims
Moaning her lonely sound
Oblivious to others
And to what goes around
Alone in the pod
She awaits her mate
Praying the truth stays hidden
Or else it would seal her fate
Alone she swims
In her own fate
Refusing to acknowledge
Her many mistakes
The sharks circle
Intent on their prey
But so wrapped in her self
She doesn’t swim away
Alone in the shallow waters
The dolphins play
As crabs snap at them
Trying to get her own way
Scurrying this way and that
To avoid what will fall
Grabbing all that she can
Attempting to take it all
Alone they swim
Moaning their lonely sound
Oblivious to others
And to what goes around
Author notes
I was trying to write a poem about.....um...well, this is what I ended up with.
Written June 27th, 2003
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v nice n unique indeed
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This poem was written about a person I knew online, in a chat room, who used to constantly whine about her life, and all the while she doesn't notice that everyone is sick of it and her, but she continues with her "whale song".
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This poem is unorthodox and it makes me think of masturbation for some reason.
It's that sentiment of being at home but also being alone in the safety and isolation of a late night bedroom.
It seems that the narrator wants to enjoy to be with people but also being alone in the same sense. It seems like the narrator is friendly, yet can be detached.
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excellent analogy, as well as taking it for face value.. the plight of the sea creatures, trying to eke out another day in their lives, only to fall victim to something bigger and more aggresive...yes, so much like life for us humans too...fantastic write Barbara, enjoyed this a lot!!!
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I can really relate to this, sometimes we are just so wrapped up in our own lives that we don't spare a thought for others. Keep up the great writing!
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yep .......this is a whale of a song.....lol........well done..
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Sigh.... oh, I can relate, yes I can. I have felt those sharks circling so many times. We pretend not to see because we feel so helpless in the face of them...
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