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Gomer says "Shizam" to Sargent Carter

"and you , O my soul where you stand,
surrounded, detached, in measureless oceans of space,
Ceaselessly musing , venturing, throwing, seeking the spheres to connect
them.
till the bridge you will need be form’d, till the ductile anchor hold,
till the gossamer thread you fling catch somewhere, o my soul.”
“A noiseless Patient Spider,”


                                                                                            Whitman.


 

Then you just write more bullshit about it,
Walt,
half baked jazz riff tommy tune in stilettos
and the poster of the bridge in tommy’s room
takes on a different view
Rod Carew in bunting blue.
daunting daunting the climb therein
from rigid to wise-guy.
trying to slip sideways
onto the tongue of life, Walt.

That’s all.

You see the Nature of this new stench,
boiling, and you are winched
oiled & stained
The scar that Caligula left.
Agreed upon
the cool slap of shoe leather in the rain
pebbles to scatter if you are a mind,
not too timid or too kind
soul that put a spell on you.

 

 

 

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  • passionvine
    March 26, 2007

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    The Poem finds the nexus of Gomer's song and the yawp

    Ah,

    but Gomer would throw off the hillbilly act

    and sing a nearly operatic baritone

    and later would jump out of the closet and gaily shock the Andy Griffith crowd

    and it those two parallels we may have the essence of the yawp man

    I am having a knock down drag out with him at present

    just finished lecturing on the artistry of the Brooklyn Bridge for my American History class and thought of you mightily the whole time

    Brilliant work as always.

    Peace.


  • MotorcycleFreak silver member
    March 7, 2007

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    Excellent

    I really like everything about this work of art. The word selection sets everything up nicely. The imagery, emotion, and message work very well. Great write my poet friend. ~Peace~Gary


  • Desiree Darkk
    March 7, 2007
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    Coolness

    Well, Gawwwwwww-ly. What? No Kilebrew?

    "cool slap of shoe leather in the rain" is cool.


  • cvillelisa
    March 7, 2007

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    Probably the best of the Walt Series. Yes, I said Walt Series since it appears you have now been invaded by his Stench.

    The Underbelly, tender and exposed, Walt's falsity. You can sense it can't you? My theory about him:

    He happened to pick up a pen when no one else did.

    Not so much a poet as perhaps a prophet (that would be in my humble opinion after all he is known as America's Greatest Poet), which I find rather fucking sad. Actually. However, he cannot be ignored, no matter how hard I attempt.

    Good thing is, I don't have to like him. I can disagree with Mr. Bloom who seems to share Whitman's provincialism about Amerika. Land of the Free and Home of the Brave... mmmmmmm.

    I remember my brothers having Carew's card. And I never liked Gomer Pyle not on Andy Griffin and definitely not on that other show --it was one of the shows that was on in the daytime when I was home from school sick, in between like Hazel and Bewitched. Or maybe after. Mr. Ed. Course I never liked Hogans Hero's either but probably was a masterpiece of black comedy that I didn't undersand at the time. A sitcom about a POW Nazi came? Fucked up -- there ya go -- America at its finest huh?


    Great poem. But you should really take a break and write a Lisa poem.





  • Adorable
    March 6, 2007

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    I just analyzed that poem in school. :]
    This is fabulous.

    "Then you just write more bullshit about it,
    Walt,
    half baked jazz riff tommy tune in stilettos
    and the poster of the bridge in tommy’s room
    takes on a different view"

    Amazing.
    I love it.
    I'd have rather analyzed this. :]]


  • Froggy-Girl
    March 6, 2007

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    from the sounds of your critique of Walt, I would say you are not a big fan of his ideals. Yet you speak in prose as well as he does of the intricasies of the soul, and the way we pass our time in life. I think I like both artists.


  • silverflowers
    March 6, 2007

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    Found every bit of this to be refreshing and highly thought provoking. Vibrant imagery and your attention to detail was so impressive I had to read it several times...


  • Star Shine
    March 6, 2007

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    The ending lines feel and sound the best of all to me, a wild ride but a rhythmic pace. I don't know how else to describe it.


  • myrataal silver member
    March 6, 2007

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    Oh Lute ...

    I cannot read you and still be I. To understand your work, I have to say: Damn! or something stronger. And: I try my best to forget all of Rome and of senseless myths. None can free me of the fragrance of being too timid and too kind ...

    Please forgive me if I say you have ... leagued me out.

    Love

    Myra


  • Love of a Bullet
    March 6, 2007

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    It means I better come up with something creative to say if I want tweleve points. Sounds like you're taking Witman out for a ride here, but maybe that is not the case. Perhaps you are agreeing, in a way, with his premise, but not with the realization (read: affirmation) that Witman espouses by virtue of nothing at all. Now that, would be interesting.

    Good luck in your future works.

    ~Das


  • gullionmar
    March 5, 2007
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    very well written


  • Cannonsfire
    March 5, 2007
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    Haven't a clue but it has a flow and strength about it that makes you feel a poem about nothing could be something, anything at all..for the poets mind is apt to throw up all signs and issues that only the poet himself truly understands.


  • mylilpunchki
    March 5, 2007

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    i thought that this was a great piece of work. You are a very talented writer and maybe one fay be known. Good job and i hope that you keep up the good work.
    Lindsay

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