There is a searing pain in my heart
It started off so soft but has grown
First it was by words that the pain came
Then it was by actions
Then it was by hurt
True hurt.
There has been pain that is known to
All living creatures
A tingle in the hand
When your leg falls asleep, a scrape on the knee
A head ache
But so few have felt the pain of the heart
Where it feels like a thousand small saws
Are digging into your ventricles
And slowly tearing them apart
This is the pain that I have inflicted on those
And those have inflicted on me
A circle of pain, hunger, anguish
A never ending circle of horror where the saws
Will never stop moving
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Simple Options For Great Writes by Violent Serenity.
600 points, ended March 20, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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that was so well descripted. it was easy to read but also so great. by the end i was about to cry.
i hope you never go through that again. the way you described it was horrifying. -
Heart ache is so damaging and painful. I hope to never have another. You express all very well.
Rose -
Makes me shiver. And feel hollow. And kinda scared. Mostly because it's real and it happens.
But being hurt and going through trials makes you the person you are.
I like it(the poem, not being hurt). Personally I would have put more punctuation in. But it works just as well without. -
Lovely!
awsome write! very deep and mello, i rather like this one alot! keep it up, and good luck in the contest!
^+_+^ Cado
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The vocabulary was very good. With no offence intended, I have never read a piece this good from anyone with "emo" in their name. This sounds like what any "average" person can go through.
Great piece, and good luck in the contest as I see it has not been judged yet (if my eyes do no deceive...)
DC
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Hmm... This is good. I don't understand the title, but that's ok I suppose. The part I liked best was
"There has been pain that is known to
All living creatures
A tingle in the hand
When your leg falls asleep, a scrape on the knee
A head ache"
I don't know why, I just liked that part. Keep up the good work.
Lea
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