Selfish
Unforgettable
Indifferent
Cruel
Insane
Death
Eruption
Did you realize how much that would hurt?
Or were you so self-absorbed not to know?
You left me to wander alone in the desert.
In all my life I never felt so low.
I wandered the desert for a year afterward.
Dry and empty my thirst could not be satisfied.
I pierced my own heart with a sword.
I withdrew into myself to hide.
The pain ran so deep I couldn't feel it.
I was numb to the cancer devouring my soul.
I did my best to ignore and conceal it
As it continued to exact its toll.
I don't know what I had done without her.
With the precision of a surgeon
She exposed the malignant cancer
That was making my soul empty and barren.
I had failed to save you that day.
I felt both sorrow and shame
Over the life that had gone away
Even though I was not to blame.
The dessert was a pain filled place
Where my shame was exposed to me.
It was there I learned to experience grace.
From the cancer I have now been set free.
I had forgiven you long ago for leaving
I knew somehow it would be for my gain.
Now that I have found healing
I can forgive you for all the pain.
Sacrificial
Unbelievable
Instruction
Creating
Incredible
Durable
Endurance
In a list
A contest entry
- FORGIVENESS by going nowhere.
1000 points, ended March 19, 2007, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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sad
this was sad and i know what it feels like to lose someone very close to be my suicide it hurts but i dont blame him because i have tryed to kill myself to many of times from age 8 to now it is a long painful and sick road to tavel on thanks for sharing you are a great poet i hope we can be friends and i can read more of your great poems thanks for sharing and Gos bless you and keep you sign: DI.
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Very emotionally driven...as one would expect with the topics of suicide and forgiveness. The acrostic at the beginning and end are so very powerful. That idea was unique, and I liked it. Well written. Thank you for your entry and best wishes in the contest.
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this is amazing in that it talks of the selfishness of the act, and the survivors examining their own selfishness at thinking one can save another. Bravo.
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I never understood those that considered sucicide a selfish act...I could never empathize with them, and I still can't. I would say the people who judge them as selfish must be selfish. People who comitte sucicide are in deep pain. We are here to care about others, not judge them.
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Very nice poem, good use of form with some wonderful bookends. It is of course the impact hat it has on the survivors that most resonates, and this would probably be quite a good poem to show someone in suicidal mood, as it shows them that they are always worth something (those I know who have been genuinely suicidal just haven't even begun to realise that anyone could miss them, they've been made to feel so pathetic, so its not even selfishness). A great write, good luck in the contest.
All the best,
Ed
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this is great and a whole new side of the subject and this really caught my attention. Some people are like that and It's great to know that everyone doesn't feel that way. Most people judge something because they know nothing about it. Great Write!
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