precious.
rare,
in our own
colors.
a gold, a treasure-
anothers' to toss.
what becomes omnipotent
to ourselves.
holding.
what takes us.
what brings us.
our faith in such things.
a freehand of the mind
neither grasped,
nor denied.
but for what we'd
cherish most.
memories.
Author notes
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memories are our greatest treasure, without them, we could not hold all the love and beauty of our families and friends. without them, we would indeed be lost.
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A contest entry
- He Took his Own Life! Please... comfort poems needed... by Periwinkle Blue.
475 points, ended May 1, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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you've been hoodwinked!
memories are what make us we, we have no future less memories of the past, and without us memories would cease to be thus we need each other, not want, need.
Dk and JD
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oh thank you for such lovely thoughts. I like this unique way of writing you have here, different.
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What wonderful thoughts!
Yes, memories are where we go, and happy ones are the best! 
Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem with us. 
It speaks volumes of positive vibrations and made me smile with admiration! 
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Precious
Great ending - was not sure where it was going to go - the ending however was excellent, like the sparse lines, simple words and layout - alla dded up to an unusual piece, and one you could feel, has a something this one.
I can't really suggest any changes, I thought this was good - I would have tried it without the spacing just to see how it read - can't say though it would improve the poem.
An excellent write.
James
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wow amazing and so pure i love it nice job!
Sara
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i hate some of mine... but im glad for all of them.... beautiful bri
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SPECTACULAR and double SPECTACULAR!!
Again another MASTERFULLY written Poem!! I love
every single line in this one but my favorite
is:a gold, a treasure anothers to toss.
POWERFUL!! well done my dear poet!!
Thank You!!
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amazing!
wow! I loved this piece. it really was a pleasure to read. I liked the choice of words and the way you laid out this poem! great job!
This was probably my favorite line:
"a freehand of the mind
neither grasped,
nor denied."
I'm not sure why, it just stuck out to me.
keep writing!
*ConvenientExcuses*
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very nice. your word choice and formatting is always original and refreshing. enjoyed. nice job with writing this.
blu
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A pleasure to read the philosophy within this piece,presented as left align enhanced it and the spacing spaced it so that it was delivered slowly and digested but perhaps the spacing could have been less,I found the length inbetween the stanzas was interrupted as freeflowing by the the thought and anticipation of oh where is the next line,that is not a criticism,I may indeed be the only one with that observation my friend,but I liked this very much and indeed,to leave a wonderful memory is a gift.Well done
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awsome bigbro this is so true ..i lost my memories wen i had my stroke they came back but while i didnt have any i felt cold unloved n not beloning to noone .. a fantatik write as always loves ya bunches lilsissa xxxxxxxxxx
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the title made me want to curl up and nap
very nice light poem
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