"when I open my heart, this is what I hear..."
the love song of the dancing sphere
the blue-green orb that cradles life
Earth Mother, Goddess Wife.
She sings in tinkling windchime chords
zephyr sighs and starlit words
vibrates to my soul's red wave, a
heartlight bassnote vena cava.
Rhythm pulse in life fed veins
bear planet stanzas sweet refrains
Ancestral memories flood my soul
of astral moondust sweet chorus roll
and weightless song with heavenly sway
on wordless ancient living clay.
The dance of life a symphony dear
"when I open my heart, this is what I hear."
In a list
A contest entry
- Another 24 Hours # 2 by poetryality.
300 points, ended March 7, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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smiling at the list hippie stuff
aye with the ehart, each pulse is a dance in itself if we close our eyes and tune into the spaces
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Thank you, great uplifting response, I love the wording of your comment.
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This is magical. There is great praise in these words. When we open our hearts, there is a multitude of what can be heard. Your poem is quite original, and unique. I love the feel of this. Makes me want to dance, spin, twirl about the room. It's ethereal! Beautiful!
Thank you ever so much for this entry into my challenge. I wish you all the best.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Renee, thank you so much for the comments, your words compliment me greatly. This was a wonderful contest. Thanks for the creative inspiration. Have a beautiful day.
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This is very visual! Its images are delightful and creative. Your phrasing is very appealing, as well. Nicely done! Best, Elizabeth
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celtic, thank you so much for reading and for your response, it is much appreciated.
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Good rhythm, rhyme, flow in these lines - such vivid images created through the poem. when I open my heart this is what I hear.
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grannyeri, thank you for reading and the great comment, I am glad you liked this.
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Brilliant.. "vibrates to my soul's red wave, a
heartlight bassnote vena cava." Simply stunning and moving.. I loved it..
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Kenji, thank you so much for the lovely comment!
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Your very welcome..
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