Dear Mummy
I am writing to you so you can hear me
I am sorry for all your pain I cause you
All the shouting I make you do
And for making the tears roll down your cheeks
I am sorry for making you hate me
Getting you angry
And making you hit me
I am really sorry for everything
Please smile again
Love you lots and lots
Emily
xxxxxxx
A contest entry
- Sadness and pain by x-Black-Butterfly-x.
370 points, ended March 7, 2007, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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cute
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this is a really sad write, it really makes me feel teary because it is so innocent and almost pleading for forgiveness which makes this a great poem and it deserved a shiny
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I like this, is sad but no tears for me. It was a different style, a pre-write from you that I don't think I have read before, which is good.
I like the simplicity of it, and the picture goes well with it, scary and sad picture, yet effective.
Thanks for entering
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i like the way you did this in a letter form it made it different and it expresses how a child feels during a time of hurt. but it must be understood tht it is enever the childs thgt for something tht they did not do. thnx for entering and good luck
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wow thanks for bronze..im glad you liked the poem i thought i would do something different to make an impact xxxxx
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OMG! This is amazing. Such truth in your words of how abused children really think they are at fault! You have really hist this subject on the head.
Well done indeed and good luck in this contest.
Gaylene
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Very Good
The chosen words lend us to believe
this is a child writing this
Very compelling and very typicle of a batterd child
they always have guilt about their colorabation somehow
Very bold writing
Rick
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SPEACHLESS
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WOW
You have done a SPECTACULAR!!job with
this write and yes it is a vey hard
subject. But like always you mastered it.
well done my dear poet!! Thank You
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This is a hard topic for me to write about...but you my friend have really written something with so much power. It gives the child a chance to voice her feelings. Dynamic and intense.
Well done, my friend
Soulful Woman
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