The path curves
flowers and trees beside
the way the colors are so bright and
the sun shines warmly as I walk along the path
humming a beautiful song of joy
I just love the spring time
do you too?
Yes, I do
enjoy this day as one
of the most gorgous days I have seen
the way the leaves reflect the light, as the birds sing
I think of all those around me and
I pray they too can see
the beauty
Author notes
I used Picture 1 to inspire me for this poem
A contest entry
- Triquain Picture Competition II by ShelleyA.
1025 points, ended March 14, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thank you for your thoughts!
I hope yo liked it enough to be a finalists.
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Nice title. Perfect syllable count. Nice imagery, flow and tone. Very nice expression of feeling. Nice word choice. Nice alliteration and assonance. You clearly express your thoughts and it fits the picture for which it was written. Thank you for your entry. Shelley
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Thank you very much! Glad you like it
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Ah the sweet magic of spring brought to life in the form of a Triquain! Refreshing and beautiful! Best wishes in the contest,
Frogz~
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Umm thank you!
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Interesting question and answer format in this Triquain poem combo. Well done.
Dennis -
Thank you! I'm glad you liked my style
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This is such a happy poem and I like the way you ask questions in the first triquain which is responded to in the second - such a lovely technique.
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Thats freezing! I'm glad to "warm" you up. Feel warmer soon
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Wonderful form and taste of spring! It about 7 degrees here today so thanks for the feel of spring.
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Thank you very much! Happy you liked it
Mem -
Very nicely written Triquain, Good luck to you in the contest...GETS
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