I can just put my hands up over your eyes,
Then look at all that stirs inside
Your thoughts, your memories, through all the sighs,
I can peer in and dissect the lies.
Or I could lay you down upon a cold table,
Take a scalpel, and cut through your head, passed labels
Of who you are and why you aren’t able
To separate what’s fact and what’s an Aesop’s fable.
If only, then life would be a cruise
Muddled lies would never swim with truth
If only, you looked as honest as your lies
–That convincing masquerade of the truth.
I never was too good at reading comprehension
Yet you want me to piece out the truth and read between the tension.
All I asked was that you grant me – to sanction,
Knowledge of what you’re scheming behind that innocent grin.
If only, then life would be a cruise
Muddled lies would never swim with truth
If only, you looked as honest as your lies
–That convincing masquerade of the truth.
If only you let me inside that thick skin,
If only you remembered times of thick and thin,
If only you realized I stood by you sin after sin,
If only you let me know it wasn’t to my chagrin.
If only, then life would be a cruise
Muddled lies would never swim with truth
If only, if only, you looked as honest as your lies
–That convincing masquerade of the truth.
If only, then life would be a cruise
Muddled lies would never swim with truth
If only, if only, you looked as honest as your lies
–That convincing masquerade of the truth.
Please tell me what you think
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Definitely melancholy .. and well written. Your rhyme is perfect. Could be a song. Well done. Blessings. Debby
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great
i love that way you use such big words that you don't hear very often it makes the poem really interesting... keep up the great work you have talent!!! -
I have to agree with the other comments regarding repetition..I was an offender of that also...But all you have to do is reread it and you will see the lines where you can leave off the If Only. It just comes with writing more and more.
The piece was very good and the point came across.
Good luck with your future work.
Soulful Woman
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I'm not that big fan of repetition but unless its done right then I have no issues. The repetition throughout really detaches the reader away leaving only thoughts of 'only if this or that line was different...' keep penning
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Repetitive
This poem was kind of repetitive all the way through, but I liked the melancholy flavor you added to it.
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