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Who am I?

Let the ink caress the paper,
my pen it's carrier,
the holder it's divine reason

For the pen swerves as my heart beats
it stops for my erratic moods
and finally begins to unleash what's within

Bring about the emotions,
love and hatred, laughter and sadness
mix it in an balance that makes a poet divine

With each written piece,
takes apart of what's hidden in me
despite I write to fulfill and satisfy...

I come to see that I have no muse,

lying unfufilled, yet happy

to only write what I see in you and me.

Author notes

Kal 24 - Khalid
The poem sets me writing... (duh) lookin at a mirror and at my reader.
Now I know I havent submitted anything for the last few...months. I read through one of your entries and decided to give you a entry to test myself. I dont find it as what I usually would have, But I do hope you enjoy and understand what it really means

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • PatheticKt
    January 15, 2008

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    hey, you never told me you were in an 'invited only' contest =[ lol, pointless, anyway, the poem, me likey because your words are deep enough to support the poem's theme ^_^


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    March 6, 2007

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    brilliant write...i also have not been submitting very often, but this is very fitting to the contest. i wish u much luck
    Tasha


  • PerfectImperfection
    March 5, 2007

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    I think that I do Kal; to me this is a very well represented piece of what you feel pouring from the depths of who you are. Thank you so much for entering!

  • Frodofan
    March 5, 2007

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    I'll start with the critical bits. You left out the "t" in laughter, and in this line, "I come to see to  I have no muse" I believe the "to" should be "too" or the line should just be, "I come to see I have no muse."

    In the last line, it should be correctly "you and me" not "you and I."

    Now for the positive bit.

    I think a load of people on this site will be able to relate to this idea. Who are you? A poet. Perhaps that's what I'll answer people now when they say, "Are you goth?" or "what are you?"

    I think this was my favorite line, "For the pen swerves as my heart beats."


    • Kal.
      March 5, 2007
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      lol

      and I was gettin worried wen u were gettin to the positive bit lol! well changes are done and done so der

      Btw, play the acoustic huh? Me like the acoustic..started few months ago


  • abuyi
    March 5, 2007

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    nice work dude..well ur title gave me another impression a little frm ur poem..but i think its fair
    best of luck my friend for the contest
    c u around
    abuyi

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