Those scars won't fade.
You knew they wouldn't.
I could feel you falling.
I tried to catch you,
But you pushed me away.
I watched you from above that night,
The shine of the knife in the moonlight was
Too much to bear,
But I watched anyway.
I saw you slide the knife over your pale skin,
I watched the one, thin line of blood form,
And you wiped it away,
And no more blood came.
You knew there would be scars,
But in the end, there would be
More than just scars.
I saw it through your eyes the next night.
Those needles were so thin,
I never knew thats why you had them driven in your bed frame.
You had them so that in the end,
You could drive them through your skin,
Not just the wood of your bed.
You would not let any blood come this time,
There was never any tears...
You knew there would be scars,
But in the end,
You knew you would drive everything too far.
I was with you the night after that.
It turned out to be your last night
Here, in this life.
I saw the plastic bottle,
Filled with pills,
I felt your adrenaline pumping through your veins.
And soon that bottle was empty,
And the pills' wrath was running through your veins.
I felt your satisfaction
And I saw you smile,
You looked at me for the first time in your life.
You said, "goodbye"
And right then, I knew
It was the end,
Because after all,
We only see our guardian angels when we are
Dead.
Author notes
option #6
A contest entry
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Sorry I did not comment before. I quite like this, it's very different. Thank you for entering and good luck x
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excellent poem it suited the option beautifully i espically loved the part
You had them so that in the end,
You could drive them through your skin,
Not just the wood of your bed.
You would not let any blood come this time,
There was never any tears...
You knew there would be scars,
But in the end,
You knew you would drive everything too far.
I was with you the night after that.
It turned out to be your last night
Here, in this life.
I saw the plastic bottle,
Filled with pills,
I felt your adrenaline pumping through your veins.
And soon that bottle was empty,
And the pills' wrath was running through your veins.
this was an excellent part and i loved the view point you wrote this poem at, but i absolutely loved the ending lines
It was the end,
Because after all,
We only see our guardian angels when we are
Dead.
this was awesome and powerful and i loved it, the title also suited it excellenty and it was an amazing piece
good luck in the contest
keep writing
~Ashley~<3 -
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Wow, I love it. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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AWESOME!!
This poem was really touching. I really enjoyed reading it. You're a great poet!! -
wow
I am at lost for words after reading this... I dont know what to say.. I really really liked it... alot.
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