Years have passed
My Stonzie
My sister
My blood
Jealousy
Bitterness
Tore us apart
Ripped you from my side
No amount of repair
Could mend that gap
A gulf so wide between us
Once our laughter bonded us
Now our silence kills us
I miss you
I guess I always will
Know that I think of you
See us as children again
Innocent
Free
Friends forever
(Till forever took you away)
Author notes
This was bad because this was actually almost too emotional for me to write about. It really hurt. I am sorry this piece was so disjointed and awful. I wrote this about my best friend Rachel. Stonz was her nickname. We grew apart for stupid reasons and I have missed her the whole of my life..
A contest entry
- For The Greatest Friends of All... by My Darkness.
600 points, ended March 16, 2007, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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So sad
I lost my brother this year...I certainly relate....this was a very sad but beautiful poem~
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AWESOME!!!
I loved it so much!!! It's so powerful, and so painful and bitter. and above all it's sad (i think not all of the painful poems are sad...it's different to me). It reminded me of my childhood friends whom i loved so much, but now they're gone. Also it reminded me of my best friend of today, honestly i'm afraid to loose that friendship, and end up feeling through that pome even more. But either way, you did an amazing job on it. I love it how you can capture emotions in simple words and short lines. it's amazing!
CPT
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Thank you.
Her real name was Rachel. I havent seen her in about 4 years. We truly grew apart when we were about 16. I have always regretted the circumstances that surrounded that day, and I think I alwalys will. It is so hard to hold onto those we love sometimes. Thanks again for the comment. Sorry for babbling.
Despair
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So sad...well written, touched my heart since I have two daughters that don't get along...maybe prayer will solve both situations, wish you well...BB
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Thank you very much!! I do appreciate it. By the way I love your picture. I collect bee's!!
Despair
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forgot to applaud the last time....=| heh!
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Short, but sad and beautiful. Great job!
-Dante
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Thank you so much.
Despair
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I have lost a friend who was very important to me too. I love this poem. It was written very well and you ended it beautifully.
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment. It is always appreciated!!
Despair
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Your welcome I think not to sound corny but you make awesome poems you should be a poet for a living.
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That was awesome your one of the best poet if the best.
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Thanks darlin. You are the best.
Despair
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STARTS CRYING :(
AHHH! DESPAIR! This was too sad
Made me all teary and sensitive. That's bad
Really good emotive write. Man that hurts when you lose touch with someone so close I know. I give you props for being able to write on such a deep and sentimental subject.
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Thanks my dearest!!! Thanks for taking the time to read!! I know you are one busy vixen!! I hope all is well in your world and I will give you a large and obtrusive hug.
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Disjointed and Aweful?
Are you kidding? The fact that you were able to put your feelings into such a beautiful arrangement to convey a true loss on paper. This is a very Passionate poem about someone very important to who you are. I think this a great piece. Do not believe otherwise.
By the way nice to see a new poem from you.
Blut Rot
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Thanks much. Sorry I have been lacking on my commenting and reading. Shame on me!!! I am glad you enjoyed it.
Despair
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should give thisperson a call and just say "Hey, you know what? I really miss your company"....or something like that.
poems not so bad like you think it to be.
-cheers
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lol thanks!! I have had a highly bad week, so I think your comment went towards cheering me up!!
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this is'nt bad! you did great! the fact that it holds emotion makes it even better! i hope that you will soon feel better. much love and luck! ^-^
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Thank you my lovely!! I think you are the greatest.
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wow.. this is not bad at all! i can totally feel your pain! believe me dear sister! i have been downt his road... and it can get soo hard! thank you for entering and i think this is just amazing... good to see you writing again!
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Thanks hun!! Good luck in your contest.
Despair
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