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Red Cross

You gotta be red and cross
With so many in inopportune times
In the land of opportunity

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  • Violet Moodswing Greeters member
    April 4, 2007
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    I like this. It is simple and to the point. If I understand correctly, haiku in english can actually welch on the syllable counts. I think you do give us an "aha" moment with the last line which is in keeping with the form. It is an original approach to the topic and it makes a lot of sense.

    Best of luck in the contest.


  • Sharcu silver member
    April 3, 2007
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    Not sure if it follows the exact rules of a haiku, but I thought it was a creative twist on the contest theme. Thanks for entering the contest
    --Tim


  • wishintreeUK
    March 27, 2007
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    Thank you for entering.

    A different take on the subject, a short piece, yet it shows you understand the feeling of the majority in the world today, well done and thank you for entering

    ~Katie~


  • Samplette gold member
    March 9, 2007
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    Hmm...a bit different. Red and cross...not sure that really has any thing to do with the red cross. I wish you well in the contest.
    Sam


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    March 9, 2007
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    Well done to you. You have spoken such true words in these lines.
    Thanks for entering our contest and good luck
    Gaylene


  • FifthDove
    March 7, 2007
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    Thanks for the entry and welcome to the site!

    I think you have said quite a lot in these three short sentences, good going for you I enjoyed the read. Thank you very much for taking the time to write for and enter our contest. Best wishes and welcome to AllpoetryDove


  • Rosemary Stroebel silver member
    March 5, 2007
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    Thanks for entering

    A different take on the subject of the red cross. It does make you wonder why we have to have destruction and death before help is given.

    Let the ink flow and your fingers dance

    Rosemary


  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    March 4, 2007
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    Thanks for your entry

    Okay so it had Red and Cross in it at least you got that. Okay I am reading it again, and again. Okay yea I get it now. There are so many without in the land of the free where we live in the richest country in the world and still we have such tragedies. Thanks for sharing.

    Good luck in the contest and welcome to allpoetry. I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

    God Bless
    Tammy


    • jestie
      March 4, 2007
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      Thanks for your comment

      Well, I wanted te express both the need for such organization as Red Cross and frustration that such organization is needed. After all this is the year when a record number of Americans are living in poverty. The rest is a play on words.

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