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desires-not any more!(naruto)


In my deepest solitude
i stay alone in this crowded world
harsh eyes stains through my soul
Not any more not any more!!

i will shine through the harshest crust
my existence would be marked
through my deepest desire
till existence is provoked through every soul

i was there alone smiling through my loneliness
in the shadows to be known
not any more not any more
now i have those people i care
and i will care for them
that's my way of ninja!!


for once i want to be seen though the crowd
acknowledge my existence
through out the known

 

as i watch being in darkness 

i follow those lost steps
to keep up the space

should i be lost again

not any more not any more!!

 

Author notes

thanks for reading my poem
well this poem is inspired by a a japanese manga called naruto, the manga is about a kids dream in a world where ninjas, shinobies live and control the defnese and goverments of there countries.. and his dream is to be the best shinobi on his village and become a hokage its the highest rank possible.. and he has no family so as he grows up he makes friends whm he considers family and can go to any limit for them.. he wants to be acknoledged and lacks in eveyrhting but still his courage and his arrogance dosnt allow him to loose..

well the write is on the theme of naruto.. every charecter relates somehow to this theme

abdulla zakir

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  • wow

    i have been a fan of naruto for a long time and ive always known his pain! but ive never seen it descibed so well ! well done!


  • DakotaSonicSister
    December 7, 2007

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    That is good!!

    Nice choice of words!!!It's very descriptive.And you followed the rules!!!I said only write dark if needed!!


  • Ellis gold member
    December 5, 2007
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    Good Poetry

    To be recognized, to be known.
    --------


  • Jeri silver member
    March 21, 2007

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    Excellent

    This is such a strong write. Finding the power within yourself to be seen, to be counted or just included. I have felt this too. Alone in a crowded world. Even if eyes fall upon me they never saw.
    Beautiful write . May you be a strong ninja my friend. Peace to you and all the loves in your life Abuyi
    I will be waiting to read more.
    Love's touch
    Jeri
    GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST!!!!!!!!!!!

  • Coralfang19
    March 18, 2007

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    This is a great poem. I think it describes Naruto's thoughts very well. Thanks for entering my contest.

    Em

  • BittersweetPhantasm
    March 5, 2007

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    wow, another naruto poem, heh. it really is popular... this is a good poem a bit confusing for me - but that's because i don't know very much about naruto...
    but still well done and good luck.

    • abuyi
      March 5, 2007
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      its a nice managa..if u like ninjas and superpowers n action,then i assure u, u will like it, its not all action its actully about friendship love and ur faith in urslf..
      u can watch episodes in youtube..just go and secrh naruto episode 1 and u will get it..
      at the beginin 9 episode u b like what the?? n then its just hooks to u..lol
      anyway thnx for ur comment.. u wont really appreciate my poemm if u dont kno abt it..

  • Sweet Sorrow
    March 4, 2007
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    hmmm so you are a fan of japanese manga or anime. i hope you enjoy it but you will appreciate it more if you know how to read our characters because when it is in english you will not really get the whole story. well anyway you just did justice to your poem. goodluck to the contest.

    • abuyi
      March 5, 2007
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      thnx for ur comment.. i watch naruto in japaneese with nglish subtitles..and i read few manga eglish dubbed, its jus i dun kno japanese..lol
      anyways thnx again
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