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Your Smile

Your smile is like a warming fire
Welcomed by my hearts desire
To hold you in my arms and pray
For this moment, forever to stay
When we part, into those carefree hours
Where love takes hold, with mystic powers
I stray into my dreams a while
Where again I see your smile
I am empty till you fill my world
Soulless in a sea of curls
Tangled up in frustration
A citizen of loves great nation
Marching to the hearts soft drum
With gentle music filled with fun
Passion for the glorious others
Those care free two,
Those lustful lovers

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  • underdose
    March 4, 2007

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    Wow, that's such a powerful write, I love the metaphors.
    Fav bit:
    "When we part, into those carefree hours
    Where love takes hold, wikth ymstic powers"

    =]
    A [makesmesmile] poem


    • Souless Poet
      March 5, 2007
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      Thank you for taking time to comment my poem, its nice to be apreciated and also nice to know ones metaphors are enjoyed also.


  • Best-to-the-Fall
    March 4, 2007

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    wow... this is what i feel pretty much right now... it's like you found my head and took all the jumbled fuzzy, heart-flippy feelings out and turned them into this... and i know that's not what you did, and i know that this is yours and yours alone. but this is just great and i know the feeling. beautiful write!