There's garbage on every surface-
maggots dropping from overhead,
no clearing for walking on the floor
and dirt with bloodstains on the bed.
You would hope that it's not real-
just another childhood nightmare,
but in the morning she wakes up
and her heart rips another tear.
She sits up fast in her bedroom
hoping nothing fell on her face,
praying an angry cry above her
for bringing her back into this place.
She curses more broken dishes
and sheds tears at more unpaid bills,
she screams her pains into a journal;
the only place where the truth can spill.
She tries to ignore all the fighting
and the feeling that she's alone,
then reminds herself with nicks and cuts
that this life can not be known.
She wears long shirts and bracelets
with a smile and sense of humor,
not letting on to her closest friends
that her home acts like a tumor.
Then every week day with the school bell
her stomach clenches in pain,
knowing she has to walk back
and be drenched in the acid rain.
You would hope that it's not real-
just another teenage nightmare,
but in the morning she wakes up
and her heart rips another tear.
-Garbage on every surface
and maggots dropping from overhead,
she goes to sleep each lonely night
hoping this time she'll fall dead.
Author notes
This is option 2- I chose the following quote for inspiration:
The worst part about going to sleep when your broken,
is knowing when you wake up you will still be broken.
A contest entry
- Everythin angst by BarbedWireButterfly.
600 points, ended March 28, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow babe.. this is great.. i havnt read a write this intense in a while.. then again.. i havnt been keepin up with you like you have with me.. lol.. but seriously.. i love this write.. its just amazing.. and real.. i accually fully understand the want to go to sleep and never wake up.. knowing that when you do.. your problems will go on.. GREAT WRITE.. i love it
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absolutly amazing honey! great imagery and the total feel was very beautifully demented. I loved this so much, definatly muuuuch better than the last one I read. sooo good. seriously.
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She wears long shirts and bracelets
with a smile and sense of humor,
not letting on to her closest friends
that her home acts like a tumor.
Why the hell does this sound like you?! Lacie LaRae, if this is how you are feeling you better tell me. It scares the hell out of me that you might not want to talk. I don't like how the poem is so close to you. But I do love the poem, the emotion is great and the imagery is phonamanal. I love you from the bottom of my heart. KISS.
Jenn
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No honey, I'm not feeling like this right now. It's just- this weekend I was at my mom's and all my old feelings come back every time I'm there. This is the old me. Love you- muah.
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very very very interesting. i liked it. the emotion was magnificent and the structure was great. good write, thnx for entering and good luck
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Thank you so much for the great and quickly respondant comment, it's much appreciated.
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