I cannot fix you overnight
Try to make sense of your past.
But I will never ask you, love
To be one whom you are not.
I cannot take away your pain
Nor can I make you believe in me
But, unlike the others, love
At least I can say I have tried
To cut the fears which bind you
And wash away the tears forever.
Though I will not try to erase them, love
For they have made you who you are.
I was very much the same, love.
Cold and dead, my heart full of pain.
It hurt too much to glance behind
And I was even more afraid to look ahead.
I never asked for you to love me
For I know it hurts to move on.
But let me be the shelter from your storm
The comfort in your soul, and you will see
That I can love you more, dear one
Though, just like you, I am broken and bound
To that which has shaped me, held me down
And led me to the point of no return.
But I fought it, my love, and I am free
To save whatever is left of you.
So hold onto me, love. There is no looking back.
We will make it through this together
Moving on is never easy, my dear one
But I will be here to take your hand
In case, by chance, you happen to fall.
But even then, I will carry you home.
So trust in me, love. Be not blinded
By the deceit and lies of times past.
For it took such strength to say the words
And I know that they are not in vain.
It hurts so much to love you, my angel
But, in the end, it is worth the pain
For God gave me courage to show you
That you are not alone anymore.
Author notes
Immortal Obscurity
My ex screwed me up pretty badly, but I've been thinking that his only purpose in life was to show me what it meant to love, with all of my heart and soul.
This is for Travis, my friend and more. He is as I was, when I met the ex, and thanks to that, I can now show him how to love, the same way Devin showed me that first night. I know that it's going to be a long road, and definitely not an easy one, but I hope that he will trust in me completely one day.
So, once again, this is for the ex-Gothic, former artist, whom I care about so much... I LOVE YOU!
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A contest entry
- 37th Contest by Tarja.
475 points, ended October 22, 2007, 3 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hope, Pray, Love by Wolven Roses.
460 points, ended February 5, 2008, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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excellent stuff..
compelling story-narrative...and so emotional. Yeah, it's hard to move on..we all need help from others.
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Great emotion, Great feel.
It is bittersweet- hard past but bright future. I like it. Definitely a good write. -
This reminds me of my relationship with my husband. Though it wasn't an ex who screwed him. He had been traumatized since he was a child due to a tragic incident. And though my guy is still "Gothic" and such he will always be the one I love! This was very sweet... I liked it a lot thank you for entering. Good luck.
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wow. I like that this can kind of be devided into the part where you are really supportive, and then to the part where you actually say that you too are broken. I have to say that I relate a lot to this, and I love how you put that feeling out in words!
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It is almost ironic, for seconds before reading this my partner of two years (as of last wed ) had just told me 'thank you for loving and accepting me as I am, not trying to make me be something else'
Both of us have had bad past experiences in love and life, finding hardness until, both in our 40's, we found each other, and with that a fairy-tale love beyond all expectations. I even had to read this to him, something i rarely so with another poets work! Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors. Hetohke'e * -
MY EX DID THE SAME THING TO ME!!!! Your poem put a new perspective on our relationship....thank you for such an inspirational poem!
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Emotive language was used to perfection.
It shows pure love, pure pain and pure feeling.
Not a typical love poem just strung together, it has
substance. You did a great job at potraying it.
Great job!
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Awesome
very deep and emotional.. this is amazing work.. just beautiful... keep up the great work..
Black Diamond Rose
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Beautiful!
It's so passionate and so emotional. I abosolutly love it! I love the last two stanzas of this poem. Beautifully spoken! Great job!
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