Lashes kiss, and alike
our rose petals
plait the passion of an aching day.
As silken strokes nudge
the evening into sultry frolics.
Our curling tongues
and twisting bodies
rush a sigh from your hungry pout.
Our lids part; your blues smile
and whisper,
“again.”
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And yes, this leaves the eyes of the reader with a feeling of wanting more. It's short, it's complete yet not complete enough to be satisfied (if you know what I mean here)
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this is lovely,
i like the depth and flow,
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this is creative and clever. Wonderfully expressive and a joy to read. Well done dear poet.
Good luck in the contest.
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oh, wow, what a kiss! I really like the phrase " our lids part; your blues smile and whisper, 'again'" I found the way you talked about some parts of your bodies specifically and others implicitly captivating....nice write and good luck!
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This was exceptional. Awesome work! It was really simple yet it was enticing all the same. Thanks for sharing & best of luck with the contest.
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this is an awesome poem. It is so simple and beautiful an effective.. and i dont no what else to say! well done and good luck
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quite a sensual write without getting graphic and painting a picture. I especially liked the lines
As silken strokes nudge
the evening into sultry frolics.
very poetic wording. Best wishes in the contest,
reenie
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I LOVE IT! Especially the again part. Amazing...And so much shorter than mine! Well done...
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