I know how to hurt,
And I know how to heal,
The one who created me gives me birth,
In a flash but early I feel,
I know how to concern,
The one who talks too futile,
Takes his belongings in end and burn,
Cross your mind and see a mysterious sun,
That lit its flames on the roots of your feet,
Saved by the Jesus you trust,
Gives you food to eat,
Wind blows and gives dust,
That's how you man are made to compete,
Crashing your way to the drove,
You see Jesus surrounded by foes,
You fight you plead and then strove,
Searching and cursing like some immoral woes,
You see anguish in the eyes though,
The same spark which glows so clean,
Kind your words but oh!
The winding down so hurtful but seen,
The solitary who saved,
The one who guide,
But there the hearts of people were caved,
But enlighten the world by His side.
A contest entry
- March New Member's Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended April 6, 2007, 51 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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For me this was a wonderful comparison to how people actually represent the love of a Saviour by the actions they show towards others. Thanks for enterring it and best of luck in the contest.
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Like some of my greeter friends, at first I thought this didn't fit. But now that I understand your message I realize it fits more than ever. Very creative idea for the poem that fits wonderfuly in our contest. Thanks for entering and welcome to the site
--Tim -
Thank you for entering.
When I first read this, I thought it did not fit the criteria for the contest, I read it three times and feel I can see where you are coming from... it seems to be a parallel between the goodness of our savour Jesus Christ... the works he did, also the good works the Red Cross do, they too do good works that help others... in that sense it does fit the criteria I believe.
Well Done and thank you for entering the contest
~Katie~
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This is a nice write, but I am not sure that it really fits the contest requirements. I will check it out again at judging. thank you for entering. :fSam
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A really well written poem which I enjoyed reading very much. Excellent message within! Thank you for entering our contest and good luck
Gaylene
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Thanks for your entry
I like the way you worded this poem. It was like you took pieces of the bible and worked them in a new way to tell of the son of God and Savior of Man. Thanks for sharing.
Good luck in the contest and welcome to allpoetry. I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy -
Thanks for the entry and welcome to the site!
A very insightful poem you’ve penned here, I enjoyed the read. Thank you very much for taking the time to write for and enter our contest. Best wishes and welcome to AllpoetryDove
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Thanks for entering
This is an interesting interpretation of this contest for yes, Jesus has saved many in this mortal world we live in.
Written with a good flow and carrying a valid message.
Let the ink flow and your fingers dance
Rosemary
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