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Red Riding Hood (rewrite)

A forest full of secrets,
Too thick to see the sun.
A heartless ruthless wolf,
Wanting to have some fun.

A girl in a red hood walks alone,
carrying a basket made of wicker.
Sounds all around,
makes her heart beat quicker.

A stranger crosses her path,
With a smile that makes her weak.
But she never guessed,
Her handsome stranger was a freak.

She took his arm,
and let him lead her.
She stayed close,
And stroked his fur.

He looked deep into her eyes,
And felt nothing for her pain.
As she flailed and kicked,
And screamed in vain.

The wolf walked away,
He never turned around.
He felt nothing for the girl,
He left broken on the ground.

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  • B0b
    March 4, 2007
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    WOW...this is wicked kinky...i love it...now i hav to get bak to work..love me

  • samcuy
    March 4, 2007

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    The wolf walked away,
    He never turned around.
    He felt nothing for the girl,
    He left broken on the ground.
    i really like the ending. very nice poem


  • Shining for You
    March 4, 2007
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    verygood

    I like this write but not for kids a bit more frighting but good poem .