One big huge glorious star
Surrounded by thousands of smaller ones
Gathered with heaven in the sky
As heaven chose the world for a bride~
The angels looked on from paradise
As the world was being prepared
Clouds adorned and dressed her shoulders
In a large veil of snow so white
To become heaven's bride that night~
The gates of paradise were opened to the world
As she joined heaven's side
A jealous angel struck out at the world
Heaven closed the gates to paradise~
In sorrow the world went out far
To take her place among the stars
She now awaits for "Heavens Son"
To come and take her children home~
Author notes
Ummm I dunno about this one
Written June 26th, 2003
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Awesome imagery Susan. You have such a wonderful way of bringing your poetry to life. This was excellent!!!
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I sat and just looked at the picture for a long minute. Exquisite.
"As heaven chose the world for a bride"... Lovely way with words.
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lovely poem,
full of starlight.
i especially enjoyed the second stanza,
such beautiful imagry.
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I love the unique way you told the story of creation and mankind anticipating Jesus' second coming...beautifully done, Sis! Joe summed your poem up nicely, I think!
Luv Ya,
< 3 Maureen
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This poem and the story it tells is an amazing one, and the picture you chose, I love that picture, I mean that has to be one of the most beautiful images I have seen posted at this site, and what is even more amazing, you completely did that beautiful image justice with your words Susan, I just loved this, the entire story of the world, awaiting the Son to return and take us all home, so once again we will be allowed to wander the heavens, you know isn't it funny, man has this desire to wander and wonder, and we have this amazing universe God created for us to do that in, with His Spirit and angels to all guide us on our way, I think you are one of those angels Susan, and you may not even know it yet, but I do
thank you so much for this spiritual and absolutely amazingly beautiful poem, I really do thank you, I needed to see "This" poem, it spoke to me quite deeply sweety,
God bless and many kind regards hugs and smiles nad things to brung your heart joy,
Sincerely,
joe -
i love it
-ali -
A wonderful piece...so charged with sprituality....you continue to amaze me my dear...hugs, Ro
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I love the entire poem, not sure about the last stanza I think you could do without it and perhaps your message would be even more powerful. You can take it of leave it. All and all it is simply mezmerizing. I love that picture too!
Red -
This is a nice philosophical/poetic mix. Much to my liking. Hope all is well with you. Me, I need to get ready for work (yuck-12-8 AM). But I can use the computer at work. It is just much slower than mine. Later, alligator. ET
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This was a sweet write... Not like your usual work but none the less i think you are perfectly capable of pulling anything off if you wanted to.. I loved it
Lynn -
Susan, i think this is a very creative, uniquely thought out post...and you always find the best pics to go with your writes! Sorrow...yes, seems she always lurks somewhere very nearby...hmmm...
UB
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What a sad poem. It started out hopeful and then became sad. Awh... ~is a softy at heart~. Poor angel. I liked the personifacation of the stars. Beautiful work.
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it's very enchanting. i loved it susan. another amazing piece.
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I'm a fiend for images, and this one got it for me:
"Clouds adorned and dressed her shoulders" Just excellent!
How lovely. It must have been personal. It gave me mixed messages. One of sorrow, another of wisdom in the midst of joy!
Very well written! Thank you for sharing. CookieZeal
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It makes me think of that scripture in, what is it, Revolation... ? Can't even think of it, but it put the same imagery in my head. Powerful write.
A jealous angel struck out at the world
Heaven closed the gates to paradise~ ... sigh, and so we all suffer today.
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profound
~~claps~~ Oh, I loved this one!!! You did an amazing job!
but this was my favorite part:
In sorrow the world went out far
To take her place among the stars
She now awaits for "Heavens Son"
To come and take her children home~
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very very beautiful
a cosmic dance
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oh hun, i think this is great beautifully done as always, dont see what you were worried about hehehe
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this is so creative susan, very interesting way of seeing something. I really liked it. I wish i knew where to get ideas like yours, i guess i have no imagination...
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what a great imagination, I like your way of looking at it, this is aglorious poem.
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this touches on those serene feelings .breathless among the clouds!
Interesting!
*smiles*
I did enjoy!
Keep penning on my friend!
Bill -
Oh Myyyy Susan ..Wow! what a way to decrible creation
Just amazing ..So pretty!! Must safe this!
think this is the most amazing loveliness on all creation i have ever read Oh me loves your way, by far it is the most beautiful hon* Loves to you hon* "Me is catching up on your writes"
Hugsss to you Dear' Susan ..Hope you are feeling better!
~Mina :):):)
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I just had to come back...i knew I read last night , but was not sure if I commented , there were a lot of interruptions at the time , but I see i did
Reenie
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Susan , I do not know why you doubt this poem...it is beautiful { a different way to look at creation } and the picture with it fits so well and is breath taking . In line 7 I think you meant to say " dressed " rather then " dresses " as the rest is in the past tense ....
Hope you are better with that stomach virus
Reenie
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Truly an inspiring piece of work.Astounding descriptivness, perfectly penned and most beautfiul picture.You've truly outdone yourself.Bravo!
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well, maybe you don't know about this one, but i do, it's great!
i love the imagery and the graphic you put in here!
blessed be
mike
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This is very beautiful the picture fits perfect for the poem,
I love this thanks for sharing
Ambre
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It's like an explosion of the One, fragmenting and forgetting.
There is a strange kind of limbo in the energy and imagery, a waiting for an awakening, yet the world doesn't know that it waits in vane for someone or something else to take the first step into Unity. The poem leaves me edgy, not peaceful, because there have been those who have taken that step where the masses dare not follow. As long as others wait for that Massiah, and take no action of their own to help their fellow human, then there will never be a homecoming or salvation.
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Now my most humble Kentucky cousin..you dunno eh? lol
Girlfriend..You are an awesome writer...never am i disappointed when i read of you..and the images you select are beautiful..the combination of your writes & visuals are astounding always..this one no different...just ahhhhhhhhhhhhh!
Thank you for sharing with me/us..I do love your work..tis why i keep coming back for more!!
Much Love
~Pamela
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Not sure about the poem, it is good, and it has meaning..I just think I need to read it when I am not half dead. However The pic I found just to be spectacular. Thanks for your comments on Violet Rain.
Carrie -
This is so different from what I've read so far from other people, and it is beautiful and unique!
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wow , this is an exceptional piece, and background is simply beautiful as well , your truly talented , there is no doubt about that , keeping penning , so as I can learn JP *s*
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this is really nice, very very different from the kind of poetry i usually read, its really pretty though.
I looove the picture, its so pretty, i hope you dont mind if i save it to my hard-drive so i can just keep it. lol.
this is a nice write,
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Beyond Beautiful**********
Oh Susan,
I love this!!!!!!!!!! stunningly beautiful Yes, I agree, the picture is gorgeous, and a perfect match for this poem!!!!!!! You amaze me sweetie
Love ya,
Karen
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