Let me tell the story of the old man here,
who lives on the lane of Greenwood.
Listen to my tale and all will become clear,
of his fate that day on Greenwood.
Many years before when youth was his friend,
a stranger had come to his door.
This mysterious woman asked him to send,
a box up the next few dark floors.
"Do not open wide; do not look inside."
she warned twice as she rushed away.
But as he walked those apartment stairs with pride,
curiosity soon gave way.
When he reached the last floor he sat on the ground,
and carefully lifted the lid.
but he soon realized that what he had found,
was not worth what he just did.
The mysterious woman appeared once more,
grinning with a blood tinted stare.
"I warned you to leave it alone on this floor,
now your dark life can not be spared."
You may ask how I know of these years before,
of the crazy man on Greenwood.
Well I know why he sits insane on that floor,
because I am the witch of Greenwood.
Author notes
Whitemaiden
A contest entry
- The Random Rounds - Pre-Contest by Frodofan.
425 points, ended March 27, 2007, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Greenwood
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Greenwood by Whitemaiden
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good!
it was intense! i liked it! good use of words!! love love love, all i give to you is my love! but yea it was really very good
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A creepy tale all wrapped in verse. Nice flow and nice write.
s and best wishes... ~Genie~
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I never got a confirmation from SoldierofaCross that you switched. Did he confirm with you?
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This poem has been read, digested, and scored for the Random Rounds competition by Jimfre Talbent; fruitloop extrodinaire.
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