Fine roses and delicate romance
Seeds of soul lost from memories
Was like a special kiss into the air
The air had sung so beautifully
Your kiss was quiet but lovely
I dreamt into the rose of night
And my thoughts touched the sky
Like soft sheets it was so soft
Sighs and hums, "speak my ear!!!
I want to know if you still love me
I find my bed to weep at times
I find my words shy to write."
Dreams drift to quiet days of bliss
where sensations left a hue of joy
your kiss... your kiss...
my lips... my lips...
Oh how your kiss still thread my lips!!!
In a list
A contest entry
- *** UNCOVER MY FEELINGS *** by Rebekah-Ann.
500 points, ended April 2, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Options! by Patched Up Ragdoll.
600 points, ended October 20, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thanks for entering, unfortunately you didn't put which option you chose in your author notes like I asked.
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Thanks for entering!
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this has some cool stanzas that just stick in your mind! great poem and i wish you good luck in my twin's contest. Merry Christmas!
~Dommi
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This is really beautiful, I like it a lot.
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"Dreams drift to quiet days of bliss
Where sensations left a hue of joy" is probably my favorite part in this poem. It describes how those good 'ole days were full of bliss and have truly made a memory that you'll always remember. The thought of it all is just so beautiful and you describe it all well. "Oh how your kiss still thread my lips!!!" makes it all the more better. If you didn't have that in this poem at all...it'd wouldn't be right. You have a great poem! It makes my heart sigh
Best of luck!
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beautiful...
I am absolutely awed...it just flowed so well...beautiful, I wish you luck for this contest...
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Beautiful, romantic.. caught in the moment, captured the memory. I love this piece. It is so lyrical and sweet. Good luck in the contest. Blessings. Debby
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nice sentiment
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I love this so much. When I read it its like the words flowed so well and were used so beautifully that it seemed musical! Gorgeous!
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I really likethis poem alot, I was especially caught by the title, would you mind if at some point in the future I used an offshoot of that line/title in one of my pomes? (fr for apples)
thanks for the wonderful write.
Shadows
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awwwwwwwwwwwwww i love this... i know this feeling oh too well! Good luck with contest...i look forward to reading more of your work
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sweet and pretty lol- nice to find a happy love poem.
I take issue with your phrase 'your kiss still thread my lips' as it should be either 'your kisses still thread my lips' OR 'your kiss still threads my lips' cos there's an issue of plurals there...
other than that (which could well just be a typo) this is lovely work
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nothing like the bliss of a kiss, what joy is this, we would be remiss to not share the wish of two pairs of lips in stereo dances, slipping and sliding to passionate heartbeats and the music of sighs....drifting into the night. lovely write, makes me wan
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thankyou i love your comment of passion and dwell thinking.
music of sighs yes you got it
well u can always kiss me lol jp thanks
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Jumps up and down yelling YAY
This work is very colorful a tad too sentimental for me however the
words paint a lovely imagery which I found artfully done
The messages is loud and clear and the reading was easy a tad flowery at times,
yet powerful at the same time.
Good work.
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This is my favorite verse: Your kiss was quiet but lovely
I dreamed into the rose of night
And my thoughts touched the sky
Like soft sheets it was so soft
Good job! -
how your kiss still thread my lips. Mmh.
How your voice still rings in my mind frame
your accent, your diction
and the way you say my name.
I like this in a way that I'm not supposed to
I like it only because it was written from you.
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thanks De Andre I would call u if u can give me yo numba again cuzmy dad threw da paper away. If u forgot mine its 9545753824 so u can call me weneva.
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Wow
So delicately written in such soft tones,gave me goose bumps,keep penning this wonderful way.
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AMAZING
its very original, one of the most different tones of a poem i ever read. i love how thought provoking it is and turuly makes you think of someone, and for me their sweet kiss. and i feel alot like you described, but this seemed to have a saddened tone to it as well. i dont feel that part very often. it reminded me alot of the way shakespeare worded his poems and plays. which i love. i very VERY much enjoyed reading this.
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Oh, the love and pillow-crushing! a common and theme with hope and tragedy, but then considering what boys are like who are you age (usually oblivious to girls!) it's no wonder that there is so much tragedy! This poem shows hope... now I noticed a trend in the writing of young poets here- that of using sentence-fragments- it gives some very artistic results, it may be the form of our time... (well, your time, since mine has passed!)
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wow
this is a lovely poem... i loved it.. sigh! sweet kisses i wish for... keep it coming..
fleur de rosa
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I really like this poem. I think the kiss is under rated and is the most sensual part of good love-making. A kiss can say a lot, it can say hi you're nice or I'm madly in love with you. Jeff
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