"Sir James the good" in Scotland~
"Black Douglas" to my foes;
I was born in late 1286,
to slay the English rose.
The first to pledge allegiance~
to Scotland's new crowned King;
a demon on the battlefield,
I fought for my proud kin.
Bannockburn in 1314~
as "The Bruce's" right hand man;
we trounced the fearty Sassenachs,
to Berwick's hills they ran.
But King Edward wouldn't give up~
he refused to yield our land;
so as one blood battle ended,
another war began.
On death I carved out Bruce's heart~
as I knelt down by his side;
in a silver casket 'round my neck,
It hung until i died.
Author notes
Whatever happens here, this has been absolutely briiliant fun, researching & learning about one of scotland's finest, James Douglas.I'm unsure wether all these details are 100% correct by the way, i've tried my best though.
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Sweet...
Well, Well, Well...playing at a Scot's vanity and heritage, how could you? lol
Alright, well three automatic brownie points, (1) for writing about a Scotsman (2)For writing about someone whose story I had yet to hear (3)For a very well written poem, excellent structure, plus I love it when people actually do research first and I was glad to see you did that. Well done!
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"Our forbears worked hard this difficult land, and their reward was the freedom and independence of self-sufficiency."
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Excellent, you do my relative proud and I do believe you have the details correct. The Black Douglas was so feared, my grandmother would tell me that he had his own chant in Scottish Lure, it went like this " Hush ye, Hush ye, do not fretee, the Black Douglas shant a git ye. And was said originally by a Scottish nanny protecting an English prince. lol, Wonderful work, hun
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Nicely written. I like how you added historical elements with poetic. Good luck in the contest. -
I'm not much on history but I like like this. Very enjoyable read!
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Great job. Congrats on the gold. Researched and everthing. Had a great old time feel to it. Could almost hear it being narrated. Great rhyme and flow too.
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Hmm...an interesting read. I have never really been into the whole "historical" poem genre, but it was interesting to learn and to have a little bit of history.
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Absolutely brilliant piece and I loved every single word of it, and you have all your facts straight, well except that he threw the heart into battle against the moors, but it still went with him. Bravo bunny
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'I've tried my best though'. you have succeeded my friend, this was a fantastic piece regarding his life. well done.
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Amazing. I can tell by reading this that you have researched and taken your time to ensure you penned the highest quality poem. Well done my friend.
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one promia never forgotten from one commrad to another for like brothers they fought till the end
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thanks a lot for the comment,
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great write here my friend do you know that he threw the heart onto the battlefield so that the king would still lead them into battle battle?
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I like it , I am a decendant of Robert the Bruce and the black douglas's , it fun to read about them in poetry etc... Good luck in the contest , Storm
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The contest is still open, so I hope you complete this fine piece before close and judging Bunny
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I can't wait until you are finished this !
It does read as though complete, but I do know you my friend...you have the idea in your mind and will astound me once you have penned all your thoughts.
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finish finish..i can see the Tartan kilt as i read....
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