"What were you thinking, son?"
asked the stiff, incredulous cop
down at the precinct.
I looked back at him, eyes cool,
pausing to appraise him:
ignorant zombie philistine
in a blue uniform, gun holstered
(for now).
"Neighborhood needed some art, man.
It's my vehicular homage to Dali."
A contest entry
- Image Inspiration #5 by Grey Mouser.
425 points, ended March 10, 2007, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Constructive critique always welcome
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Ok, who's playin the bongos while the beatniks out driving, then deciding to redecorate the neighborhood. Love the "ignorant zombie philistine", that makes the whole write.
Thanks for entering into the contest.
Be well and be blessed,
Mouser
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This is a modern day vehicular masterpiece...
'The art of the hanging car' You got it with
this one man... too cool. laurie.
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This was a very cute write I really enjoyed it a great deal thanks for sharing this It was very well written.
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Thanks :)
Glad to see the story of it all is making y'all laugh
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WWWWOW.
i really liked this! pictures and humor. two of my favorite things. you did really great and good luck in the contest. i love the word choice too! "ignorant zombie philistine" is probably my favorite! great job! -
LMAO 
I'm s'prised ya even REMEMBERED... I love Dali's work, too...I have several poems with "The Persistence of Memory" posted on them; another one I've used is "Person at the Window"...& the one of elephants looking into the water & seeing swans...Whoaaa...Hmmm...My late sweetheart told me about an episode in college where the engineering students dismantled a jerk professor's MG & planted it in a tree..."Strange Fruit", indeed...The next semester, it was found in someone's dorm room... Grand penning, Poet...Sorry, nothin' to critique here... Wanda
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some of my favorite contests on this site are picture inspirations so i checked out this contest yesterday
usually pictures urge me to write something... but this one had me stumped. so i gotta say i dig what you've done with this... and 'vehicular homage to Dali' cracked me up
excellent write and good luck in the contest
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