Compassionate love spins held melody
Capturing delicate memories
Inhale within soft hands of his lover
She quietly hums his scent within
To stain her lips with one last kiss
Author notes
Of a girl who is twirling within a box of held memories as it notes she inhales within her nose. She continues to dance within
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wow. this has so much passion and love in it. This was a awesome poem! good luck in my contest!
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beautifully written, and with such compassion and love.. i envy this and you.. good luck to you in the contest!
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You are trying to steal the trophy from me. It doesn't matter, you are skilled Keep up the great work and best of luck
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Wow. I'm not sure how much I can really say on this. You have captured a very beautiful and carefree love, but a deep and passionate one as well. This was excellent. Very nice job with this and best of luck. You are a phenomenal poet.
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Ooooo, do you know what I was thinking when I first read? ((Okay, I'm going to tell ya, lol)) You could actually use this and add it to the previous poem I just commenting on to give the other poem more depth. Just an idea. Although, I could just be loosing my mind so if it sounds like a dumb idea--it is okay
--Katina
In need of a vacation!
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Love in a memory box ..original , magic whimsy feeling ..an aura of magic felt here..this is
sweet to the mind.
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I love this so much is said in a short poem the last two lines are are just amazing. A lovely write.
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This is beautiful. Very strong and loving in it's brevity. Smooth flow and very peaceful read.
Great job, in so few lines.
Outstanding!
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