bring the blade down to my wrist
It all will end with just a twist
A twist will stop my beating heart
The pain will end, to never restart
The blood will flow from open wounds
It all will end so very soon
The red will ooz onto the floor
Until my heart will beat no more
The tears will not fall from my eyes
no more smiles made of lies
The pain will stop dead in its tracks
From here there is no going back
Nowhere to turn or run and hide
Only my blade stays at my side
My loyal blade that is always there
my blade and I the perfect pair
Author notes
lemonhead rox my sox! haha had to add that
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Excellent
i really like this cuz i can relate to this cuz i used to cut my wrists and i have thought about suicide very recently its sad to think about and hard to write about i love this its great so keep on writin
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love it just like me check my poems
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Touching
I really liked this poem. Mainly because this is how ive felt a lot recently and it kinda, helps me to organise my feelings by seeing them organised already for me. If that makes sense at all. It flowed really nicely and left a strong powerful message within my mind. Very well done
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Amazing
I love this one. It's like looking in a mirror and having my emotions reflected..if that makes sense
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it makes perfect sense
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i really liked this. the emotions are really strong. i kinda know how the person in this poem feels because i have been in similar situations. really goo
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Outstanding...
This is beautiful, with a graceful flow. I can relate to this poem so much, the cutting, the wanting to die, how it seems so easy to just press a little harder, and it all will end. Fantastic job, and beautiful poem...
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I love it, true pain.
You seem like you really know how it feels to know what it's like to want to die.
"Ooze" was spelled wrong, however.
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easy to relate
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Well written!!!! Although a very sad subject to write about! I know what it's like to feel like this and all I can say to those going through it is: It does get better! Maybe not as quick as you may like, but, in time. Trust me, I know! If you check out some of my older poems (as well as a few of my newer ones) you'll see that there's been alot of messed up stuff that I've gone through, but, it can only make you stronger! Right? Sorry I was rambling! Very well done!!!!
~DAWN~
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whoa! very gloomy. but i do think it's sad that people can do this sort of self-sacrifice. I just hope people who do cut find alternative ways to feel better. Anyway, i love your rhyming, I've always been your fan! It's been a long time since i got on the site though. TAke care. Great work
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Wow, I loved this poem. I really loved the lines
The tears will not fall from my eyes
no more smiles made of lies
Excellent write.
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this is reallygood, it kinda has the same fill as my poem blood streamed tears run down my face
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i loved the pain that came through the words of this poem!!!
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It's amazing how the most painful writes are usually some of the best ones. It's sad when people have to endure the pain it takes to write something like this. But this is really good.
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this is really good never read ne think like this be fore......i like it alot my favorit part was the benining:
bring the blade down to my wrist
It all will end with just a twist
A twist will stop my beating heart
The pain will end, to never restart
very beautiful but also very sad on how we the people sometimes solve our problems with something with just a simple blade........
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wow this was really good but it made me sad. but thats a good job
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Gosh Jess I love it! it's awsome, it really expresses ur true feelings. and ur emotions were clearly expressed..love ya sis! -Hopey
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great job! I love all the uses of the words!!
Even though you didn't add what option you did, I'll let it slide!
Again, Great job!
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that was good. keep on writing
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i plan to keep writing
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This is something that stands out to me so much. You have a lot of power and strength when you speak.
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wow, this was powerful, sorry i havent commmented for a while. forgive me?
this one really showed me how good you are at writing, you make the rhyming look so easy, and i could see it all in my mind,
brill write
faithless x
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of course i forgive u just don't do it again haha JKJK thanx for the comment it is not easy at all but i love poetry more then my life
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