Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read Contests Groups Learn Forums Store Help
 

acinonyx jubatus

there’s a white lazy cheetah with two black spots
passing somehow euphoric through my savanna room
mystically stalking something that is not, hiding behind a split second
with all his tracks concealed in time haunting the moon 
and there’s smoke around his perfect face, 
and his calling...
i’m falling...
and it keeps snowing...

Author notes

short poems

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments


  • silverscent gold member
    March 4, 2007
    Edit | Reply
    The first two lines were my favourite, creating a new and thought provoking image. I'll say though the flow was odd, making it difficult for me to read fluently. Maybe more punctuation would aid this? Thanks for entering.