You should have just the best, not the rest,
none of these boys could ever pass my test.
I confess - you deserve more than any man could give.
One life to live, one heart to give,
and sometimes it breaks, but that is just what love takes.
You make mistakes - you have heartbreaks,
but you learn, yearn and burn, and maybe in turn
for what you give, learn and try,
and all the tears that you cry.
For all the laughs that you had,
and the good memories gone bad.
you'll be left with your best-love,
The kind that comes straight from-a-bove.
The kind that makes doves fly, and makes grown men want to cry.
The kind that knows no time, and makes men want to rhyme.
But if I had five-lives to live I don't-think I could give,
All the things I think you should own, but let me make myself known.
You deserve a man that won't lie, who will try, cry and die.
Just to keep your face in a smile, and make your life worthwhile.
Because you are his perfect one, he'd choose you over the sun.
You make him complete, and you feel whole again too,
for you there's nothing that he wouldn't do.
You deserve just the best.
**** the rest.
Author notes
The odd punctuation is to try to denote the rhythm.
Howaboutit?
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Wow.
This is exactly what every girl/woman wants and needs to hear, especially when she has had her heart broken.
The feeling in this, it's so.. real.. so strong. You did a wonderful job with this, and I do hope you continue the great work. -
Love it!
Good rhyming! and Funny too!
**** the rest!
It's a serious message to girl but with a taste of humor at the end.
Keep it up!
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"The kind that knows no time, and makes men want to rhyme." that part was funny.
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wowzers!
this is very good! i feel the emotion! keep it up!
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Excellent
This is a very nicely written poem my friend. I love the rhythm and the word choice you have used on this one. It creates an excellent atmosphere to allow the imagery to emerge from it naturally. ~Peace~Gary~
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wow. this is just fantastic. the rhythm was right on, and the rhyming was perfect. very descriptive with the imagery as well. it gave me a whole new outlook on what love can be. and this may have given me a little hope that i could still be actually capable of loving another person just as much, and that i'd find that someone who can make me complete just as i can make her feel whole again.
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its truely difficult to find such a wonderful man with whom you can share these beauitful feelings. hold on tight, and never let that spark go out. you two sound perfect for each other
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You deserve a man that won't lie, who will try, cry and die. Just to keep your face in a smile, and make your life worthwhile. Because you are his perfect one, he'd choose you over the sun. You make him complete, and you feel whole again too, for you there's nothing that he wouldn't do. You deserve just the best. this is jus so true. I can honestly say i have been lucky enough to find a man who is all those things and treats me that way i truly enoyed this poem!!!!!!
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You make him complete, and you feel whole again too,
for you there's nothing that he wouldn't do.
You deserve just the best.
**** the rest.
so eternal work defining the universal immages of the life in terms of the picture of the love and the lovers as well...Indeed a very rare philosphy here...Well the skill and the magic of the immages are very beautiful here bringing a kind of a unique thought in every line...a beautiful concept to deal with and the word structure are very relevant to express the concept as well..I must say .. it is a great poem here..
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