You're throwing me around like I'm a rock
like I'm unbreakable, as if I can't feel
tossing me from one area to another
taking me from one emotion to the next
but what you can't see
the knowledge you're blinded from
is I'm a glass paperweight, solid, but still glass.
In the middle, a pretty flower
colored in a mixture of blue and purple hues
a little explosion of life and color living inside of me
glowing and thriving within
and slowly it's fading away
the life and color in me is dimming
while my exterior is being cracked.
You can break me, though it's hard
it can still be done
and my boy, you're succeeding in the challenge.
Please tell me what you think
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Wow! I love how you end this... talking about how hard it is, possible but hars. Examples, and feelings and then it's there... "and my boy, you're succeeding in the challenge." Great!! I can imagin a lof of things going on outside of these words! It lights my fantasy! Keep it up!
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Oh thank you so much! Your words meant a lot to me! :]
Madison
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Ooooh i LOVE the imagery in this! You as a glass paperweight, sturdy but glass nevertheless, with a core of exploding beautiful colours, delicate and still spectacular. Wow. Its amazing. I know what its like to be treated like you won't just shatter into pieces, even when its a very big probability. Tell him so. Then kick him, from me
see if HE breaks. XxXxXx
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heh, will do just for you Aleee.
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A piece easily relatable to. Well, at least, I know I related to it very well.
It was just... great.
The flow was a little off, but it's a freeverse so it's not really applicable, but flow is still nice.
The whole poem just spoke of things both said and unsaid.
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I can see how it was off in spots, I might have to fix it, but I doubt I will. Thanks for the comment. :]
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let no one eclipse your light...
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thank you. =)
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Wow... very well done. I think this is excellent. I'm not sure about the last line but the whole flower in the glass paperweight and everything was just superb! BRAVO!!!!!
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eh to understand the last line fully, you'd have to know my whole situation and it's a bit long and a bit complicated to go into. So use your imagination if you'd like. =)
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Powerful
This is a great analogy. You did a fantastic job with the detail and the comparison between the rock and the paperweight. Whoever this is written to should take heed of the warning. This is a good write and again, you did a great job with it.
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Ah thank you very much.
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