Bronzed and toned, his muscled form
Erect and willing to conform
To tease and please, beg for more
Wet and hot to the core
Elicit moans of greatest pleasure
Exploring deep, the hidden treasure
Nestled bodies pull and press
Tongue descends in soft caress
Hunger drives passion's play
Enticing moves, bodies sway
Sultry dance to captivate
Hidden plans of all lust's fate
Enveloped in the pulsing fire
Emerge as one, complete desire
Thrusting rythm, seizmic beats
Stroking love between the sheets
Author notes
Hmm, maybe I should read the entries to inspire my own pen, lol.
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In a list
A contest entry
- INSPIRE MY PEN by Angels Delight.
450 points, ended March 13, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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whew! Brava! Bloody smashing write!
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Very Nice write baby! Cant wait to see more
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Bravo!
Oh what rhyme to beat in time between the sheets.
Poem to rise and fall as breaths to make complete,
Forever then her passion from the flames within,
To ever raise my temperature in perfect sin!
Well done Storm of passion, you always manage to make me wish for more.
Keith.
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Thank you Keith. Much appreciate the comments.
Storm
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Dare I say it
I wish it was me. This is a great read and filled my mind with so many wonderful and erotic thoughts. can you call me each night and read to me so that I can fall asleep and dream of such things.
Love it all.
Terry
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LOL, thank you for the wonderful comment. Most appreciated. Hmm, call to read it to you eh? Could get boring reading he same thing every night, lol. Thanks again, glad you enjoyed.
Storm
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BRAVO STORM
My Friend
What can I say...I love acrostic and I love erotic poetry...So for you to have combined the two is brilliant in my eyes...Your word play was simply amazing and the rhythm was perfect...The words just rolled off my tongue.
Thank you so much for entering and I do wish you the best of luck in the contest
Love ya
Tes
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Thank you Tes. Appreciate your comments hun. Having been in quite a dry spell myself lately with writing, I wasn't sure about this. I am having a hard enough time writing anything, never mind adult. Good luck with the contest.
Storm
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the acrostic aspect of this poem really adds something to this already well developed poem
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Thank you so much, appreciate your comments.
Storm
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Enveloped in the pulsing fire
Emerge as one, complete desire
Thrusting rythm, seizmic beats
I loooooove these lines...you use such creative vocabulary in them.
the only mistake i see is rythm is spelt Rhythm. Your flow is awesome a continuous rhyme scheme both at the end of the phrase and some within the phrase. great job with this really enjoyed it! Sensually satisfying!
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Thank you for the comments,much appreciated.
Storm
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