She has such a big heart
She is so full of love
She was blessed with all this
From the good Lord above
She just can’t understand
Why he treats her this way
She gave him nothing but love
Now she must get away
It started out small
Just a slap now and then
She said she was sorry
It won’t happen again
Convinced it was her fault
That was part of his plan
He’d blame it on her, see
He was that kind of man
Ruthless and evil
Some people would say
But this sweet girl loved him
She’d continue to stay
Through the pain and the suffering
She stood next to him
But as time wore on
Her patience grew thin
Her friends they all told her
Girl, get away
As the violence grew harsher
And increased day by day
She was trapped in his clutches
She could never break free
He had full control now
That should never be
She knows what she must do
She now has a plan
Get herself and her children
From the hell of this man
She’ll stay till she can leave
Then she’ll pack up and go
I pray that she can soon
For I love her so
Author notes
I'm just an ordinary guy with an extraordinary love for others, especially the underdogs!!
A contest entry
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Comments
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I loved the rhyme and the rhythem it was really great. The flow was excellent and absolutly flawless. I loved what you wrote about, very powerful subject, put into nwords by your very powerful and emotional poem. Well done and good luck in the contests.
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I really love this poem, it's very touching... and I love your rhyming in it, it always makes a poem nicer if it has great rhymes and great rhythm. Can you put your theme in the authors notes as well? I would hate to DQ someone for that... Great work, good luck!
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wow this was wonderful. I'm glad that you entered the contest and I wish you the best of luck!, and if this is true then i really do hope that she can get away from him with her children, good luck to her and you
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Hmm, a very strong thing, abuse is. Makes for a good write, if portrayed correctly. ^-^ My ex used to -emotionally- abuse me. And mentally. I didn't notice it until I realized that every waking minute, he HAD to know where I was; Even after I broke up with him and tried to be his friend.
It's a good thing that she got out of that relationship, and that she has a good friend like you to tell her that it was a bad thing.
Good write!
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