I tried to jot down my tangled thoughts
Onto paper with ink
But everytime I would try to write,
My mind would just not think
I'm trying to write this so you can understand
I want you to convey my feelings in this letter
But every time I try to write
The ink just wants to splatter
I'm trying to remember my frozen thoughts
But to the paper, my eyes just stare
Because everytime I try to write
My mind just breaks and flares
My heart is screaming out
But my mind is too frozen to hear
Because the more I try to write
The more I tremble with tears
My mind is winning again and again
I've stolen myself from me
Because I'm trapped in this paper that I can not write
And my heart doesn't want to see
Soon the pen goes into my arm
And blood reaches the paper
The more I try to write
The more my mind tapers
Splashing to the paper, the red makes a stain
Smiling, I know my secret's out
I watch the letter write itself
And fall out of my shroud
Author notes
I don't know what came over me...i just wrote it. lol
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500 points, ended March 25, 2007, 41 entries
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Forgot to applaud!!
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"And blood reaches the paper"
I would say that your feeling were very well conveyed. Nothing screams pain better than blood.
I understand how fear of rejection can keep from expressing your feelings, even to yourself... Wonderful, you are my muse! But yes, a great write, how about sticking around and giving us more -
Wow..
Thats an excellent poem...I can really relate to it as well...
Great job
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I tried to jot down my tangled thoughts
Onto paper with ink
But everytime I would try to write,
My mind would just not think
THIS IS A EXCELLENT POEM!!!!
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"Smiling, I know my secret's out
I watch the letter write itself"
I love that concept...Alot of my poetry has suicidal undertones, so I can really relate to this style. Good job.
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