Heart hears your whisper
drifting into chasms
where the bear now walks.
Strength listens to ears
for remembered touch
and I know
your memory lingers.
Lips hold finger trace
before the moist
of lover's kiss
engulfs the spark of passion.
Where clouds rumble
and part,
polar breath inhales your spirit
and yet ...
a part of me is missing
and that part is you.
In a list
A contest entry
- Pale Power- ends this afternoon by CarolDesjarlais.
525 points, ended March 2, 2007, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - There's Something Missing by Danna Hobart.
375 points, ended January 11, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - GOODBYE by Swan song.
15000 points, ended November 1, 2008, 3 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Be published in the next Allpoetry Book! Theme: Grief by Kevin.
800 points, ended May 15, 111 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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What a stunning
piece of poetry!! You master the words like, not the french horn, violin, flute or and other instrument, instead you have written this with the talent of the . entire symphony orchestra. It truly resonates in hearts starlights amphitheater. Your labored pen is spilling some Beautiful poetry.
Marvelous
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Thank you for taking a moment to read and leave your impressions. This poem holds a special place within and your comment is so much appreciated.
I have to give special thanks to a wonderful young poet, Rogue Poet, who helped me get the right spelling down for the French phrase.
Thank you again for your kind words. I appreciate them so much. ~Pamela 
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I got chills on the last line. Made me think of Doctor Who without Rose. I am way too into that television show. Anyway, thank you for entering my contesst.
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I am paled by the power of emotions felt while reading this sad and yet most sensual piece. I was left breathless by the lover's kiss which engulfed sparks of passion. Then I became overwrought with a lilting sadness at the thought of losing it. Your works take me to such heights every time I read one of them. You truly are the MAESTRO and this masterpiece is another example of that. Congratulations on the well deserved gold and best wishes in the next contest. Thank you for sharing your God given gift with all of us. I am left humbled again. Love you my friend, Joyce 
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Joyce
Thank you so much. Yes, this piece does hold a special spot for me as you well know. Thank you for your kind words on this piece. I appreciate them so much. ~Pamela
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I hope my comment isn't blank and send you the points thankful for a touching theme
writer who can be terse but give verse
I feel oneself maimed as losing a hand, with the phantom sensation wanting to come out of numb hibernation almost to use the love I saw in first stanza... and there could be such homeostasis.
There's a void but recognition and it isn't all called or recalled for lack.
Exhaling can almost seem evaporating without the pressing on, as some would say the center for endurance. But reception can be to how big the gift is in steps, however after crisis of ground as there's lingering more than "polar breath inhales your spirit" but time as that which enivened souls.
I can hardly sit in my chair with this so as to really say anything but I'm glad you offered it for more reading.
them words can reach...
also called
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also called
Thank you for such a wonderful comment. I am pleased you enjoyed. Thank you. ~Pamela
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Oh my! this grips and hold the heartache of true loss. It tugs and dig at so many places in me - A Worthy GOLD!
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Ken
Thank you so much. ~Pamela
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Your ending line here holds the heart of the entire piece I feel. I envy the talent that you have of spilling emotions out into these beautiful poems
This is a remarkable verse of missing what makes you complete~
A truly beautiful soul you are my friend. Nobody could read your poetry and not see right into your heart
Absolutely moving beyond words
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Ahh. Thank you so much. I am very very pleased for your comment here. It means the world to me. So much has happened and release for me is key. *sigh* I miss him you know... ~Pamela
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It is as if your emotions are tangible and they breathe in your verse...if that makes sense. My warmest thoughts are with you Pamela
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"Strength listens the ears
for remembered touch
and I know
your memory lingers."
Beautifully penned, Pamela...Carol (shewolfnative) is one of my very dearest Friends, my Sister of the Soul...I can easily see why she gave you the gold, knowing her as I do...& she has impeccable taste, as well as an inherent sense of what's Truth in writing...She obviously found it here, within your words...Well done, Lady... Wanda
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Wanda
Thank you again. Hard to get a gold from Carol. I was absolutely astounded that I did. I wrote so straight from my heart that I can't even read this poem without crying. Thank you again. ~Pamela
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I know; I got one from her a time or two...it was more thrilling than anything else. I felt like my work had been honored, as well as understood. I understand the tears, too.
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A truly beautiful poem just the confirmation of what I was saying earlier "You are a fine poet" I love the deep but smooth tone in this one and you words choice is just wonderful. Congratulations.
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doomday
Thank you so much for your wonderful words. There were so many terrific entries to this contest, I never expected an award. I was floored. I appreciate your taking a moment to read and leave your impressions. Thank you so much. ~Pamela
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Well the host makes wonderful inspiring contests and they spark wonderful entries. Inspiration has to come from somewhere beautiful and/or intense. Your poem was not only beautiful it was unique well deserving of a Gold.
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It needs not be missing
This missing piece will be with you always, but will always be missed.
Such a deserving Gold with this superior write Pam. This is crisp, refreshing and poignant.
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Jim
Thank you so much. I was shocked to receive an award for this one. I am so pleased you thought too, it deserved recognition. Thank you. It is missing, but forever within. An odd combination. You are good to me. ~Pamela
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I have heard the pound of ice pound sorrow and its steely breath...wow, this is very unique and an awesome write.
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shewolfnative
Thank you so much for your wonderful comment and Gold? Oh my, I never expected it. Thank you so much. ~Pamela
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simply beautifully penned
This is a beautiful piece of literature that left me in tears as I felt through every inch of my soul and heart the emotions and the gripping value of this beautiful piece.
On a little side note : Your title has a little mistake, the word ``manqué`` is mispelled - it should be ``manques``
Otherwise you have stroked a masterpiece worthy for the highest honours!
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~Dave
Thank you so much for helping me with the correct spelling of my title. As I said, I did struggle with this and am pleased to know how it should be presented. THANK YOU. And too, my friend, thank you for your most kind words on the poem. I appreciate them very much. ~Pamela
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I love that last line..
'a part of me is missing
and that part is you.'...actually I like many lines in this, but I think the ending is so important...and yours is great!
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going nowhere
Thank you so much. The last lines are the meaning of the French title, so yes, they are so important as they are the core of the entire verse. Thank you so much. Your words mean more than you know... ~Pamela
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