When first I looked into your eyes
each breath became a thousand sighs.
My heart drummed out a thunder beat
I glowed with joy from head to feet.
The hand of love had touched my soul,
as the bell of destiny began to toll.
The tide of love began to rise,
the world was filled with summer skies.
My sodden clouds of cold and Gray
glowed with gold, then wiped away.
A brilliant rainbow arched across,
as waves of love began to toss.
The air was filled with lovebird cries,
when I first looked into your eyes.
When I first looked into your eyes,
all time and space were paralyzed
And in that instant, I was shown
a universe I had never known.
I dwell there still, in Paradise,
when I look into your eyes.
A contest entry
- March New Member's Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended April 6, 2007, 51 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
hOpe u Like it...And PLz...teLl mE iF iT nEedz mOre AmmendMentz!!!
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An absolutely beautiful poem. Not on topic for the contest as you know already, but hopefully you will find another one to enter it into. It will certainly impress some folks
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This is one of the better entries that I've read so far; however, I do not see how it fits within our contest outline. I'm sorry, but you'll be disqualified from the contest. However, thank you for sharing this very wonderful poem with us
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lol...thank You!
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get it outta here! great poem but totally unacceptable for the topic. -
I am with Dove on this one. You are not truly eligible for this contest and I believe this poem should be have been in the February Contest for the topic of love was in Feb and this poem does not fit into this contest at all.
This said this is a truly beautiful love poem and I enjoyed the flow from the start to the end.
Let the ink flow and your fingers dance
Rosemary -
Welcome to Allpoetry!
This is a beautiful poem, the rhyming is great and the flow is fantastic and kept me right on track.
But although this poem is very good it does not qualify for this contest, as the contest states:
“This contest is open ONLY to NEW MEMBERS of AllPoetry that joined in the month of MARCH. If you joined February 28th, you are still eligible to enter as long as you DID NOT enter into the February New Members contest.”
And you became a member on FEBUARY 27th
I’d like to take this opportunity though to welcome you to the sight, if you have any questions or concerns please feel free to contact any greeter or simply click on the help tab at the top of the screen. Dove
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Thank you!
I really feel warmly welcomed here. And i hope I won't disappoint you in my works!
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I son't see what this has to do with the red cross. It is a good write, but personally I don't see it fitting the contest requirements. :fSam
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Thank you for your entry
This is a sweet love poem full of beautiful sentiments. The graphic you have chosen is spot on for this particular poem. You have added emphesis to your poem by repeating the last line, well done.
All the best for the contest, keep up the good work
~Katie~
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This was a very good piece. I like writing love poetry myself. I wont claim to be as smart as our greeters (at least I think they are greeters) and say I know why the one stanza is long. The only thing I could think of is maybe its to draw you in more because when you are in love good things seems to last only an instant. However, I do know a good piece when I see one and this is definitely a good piece.
If I may make a suggestion though... most people hate sticky caps (ThIs StUfF). You should avoid using them whenever possible as most do not like reading them. For example, it hurts my eyes to read them. I almost passed this poem up just because the preview was in sticky...
All that being said, please keep up the good work and best of luck in the contests. I look forward to more of your works.
Shadow Wind
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Thanks for your entry
A good poem very good flow and nice rhyme. Your love is very apparent and you describe your feelings well. Nice imagery. Thanks for sharing
Good luck in the contest and welcome to allpoetry. I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy -
Beautiful
This is a wonderful write indeed. I love the emotions you have penned, the rhyme and rhythm also are just perfect. I can also see why you have made the one long stanza and then the last one.
Great write indeed and good luck in our contest
Gaylene
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